kris

You made use of some really beautiful metaphors and imagery..However, it did not have any rhythm, structure or all seemed a little bit mishmashed :/ It was also too long. ...

Over all i thought that this poem was OK. It seemed to vier toward being purple prose; which is all to easy to do to impress an audience, instead of ...

First and foremost i abore excessively long poetry. This is nion 3lines short of going into the fiction section. You expressed some wonderful ideas in this "poem" though. I'm really ...

Some very good imagery here, with some rather clever rhymes too. However as much as I'd love to prattle on with praise, I am not allowed. *grimaces* So let us ...

For your first ever poem, this is brilliant! I like it because you use a lot of very evocative imagery & you had a very confident structure to your piece. ...

Sup' Eimear? long time no speak eh? i hope you're ok. Anyway - "LET US, OUR BUSINESS COMMENSE!", to quote Moliere ;P Firstly I think your structure is inspired! it ...

fistly - oooomg that was long >< secondly - I really enjoyed it, coming from up'nerth i enjoyed some of the coloquialism that i am fermiliar with. There was a ...

WOW! this is such a beautiful poem, I honestly, really enjoyed reading this. The devices in your poem; where very well chosen - very evocotive. There weren't any grammatical or ...

First of all, i commend you for attempting such a short poem. I do despise excessively long poems >< hehehe ( and NO! it's not because I'm lazy >

I'm in some sort of Fuck up land Where atomic bombs are beautiful And hydrogen bombs are closer than they appear I hear some child whispering Heroin is good for ...

I wasn't terribly keen on this poem, if I am being honest. It lacked any definite direction or structure. the absence of punctuation, made for a irksome read. HOWEVER! You ...

How very passionate! You have definitely invested a lot of yourself into this isn't really an ode though (just to be an annoying cretin :P). You certainly have a good ...

You know my opinions on this gaz :D but hey! i'll tell you again anyway. FOR THE WHOLE WORLD TO SEE! *thunder cracks ominously in the distance* I think your ...

Firstly, my dearest. WELCOME! welcome to our happy little community :D I that you really enjoy it here. OK LETS DO THIS THANG! I really liked the overall feel of ...

Over all an OK poem. I did not tier of it, nor did i wee myself with excitement :P You did manage to create a very solid sense of scene ...