klotrox16

All in all, I thought this was cute. But I'll leave it at cute. I think you could've been more specific with the reason Halloween wasn't about candy or the ...

I thought that it was fairly clever in some aspects, but highly cliche in others. It felt in this line like you were trying too hard: As we know, There ...

Extremely short, but SOOOOO CUUUUTE! I loved it! and thought it made perfect sense in an otherworldy-random way. Had kind of a curious toddler theme going on. The last line ...

While some of the end stanzas were a little choppy, this line flowed beautfifully. Yuor best one I only wanted the best for you, not this unrest for you. This ...

Well I think all-in-all your English paper is fine. I mean, I'm taking writing 121 right now so there's not much I can give you. But as for your poem...AWESOME! ...

Even though it was very short, it was cute, to say the least. I liked the consistent rhyming, though I think you should split up your stanzas a little more. ...

First off, I think you're a wonderful descriptor. I felt the enigma of the character and the apprehension he felt, and the entire text had a nice, even flow. The ...

Well I loved the imagery and vivid use of adjectives, but I have a few concerns. First, in this sentence you misused a semicolon when it should've been a simple ...

I think this was very original, although not quite my taste. I loved the imagery and how you perfectly used adjectives effectively in getting your message across. This stanza especially ...

Overall, the information is fine, but the syntax leaves much to be desired. Though your vocabulary is impressive, you overuse "The" as a sentence beginner. Try to find a more ...

Well I have to say, I like your repetition. How you switched between to repetitive verse endings to draw together the poem. It emphasized your point and built suspension. But ...

I love how this poem was sad and comedic at the same time. I liked how it was a paradox; it represented your mixed feelings about your friend moving, that ...

I love the symbolism of this poem and the personal depth you put into it. But I think you need to clarify this line: "The seconds fly by gone into ...

I liked how you put it in letter format, but a couple things. First, your rhyming is irrgeular, so see if you could shape it a little more. Second, I ...

I think your lyrics have a good message. The flow is solid and so is the rhyming, except "See the sun, it’s begun to make beautiful sound" is kind of ...