kittykat

Hi Pinata! My corrections are in bold because the colors hate me. :D Little Raven Black, How can I love thee? How can I not force myself to hate? You ...

Just a quick tip, review twice before posting. Oh and please put spaces between your paragraphs, it just makes it easier to read. :D When the main character or any ...

My eyes hurt... First, you need to put spaces in between your paragraphs. There was absolutely no capitalazation, which was need in A LOT of places. None of your names ...

I tried to get my fixes in red, but it didn't work. You'll have to look for them. :D It wasn't that bad for your first attempt Lulu. This was ...

This was really good, especially the part when you mentioned how long he's been playing the violen. I didn't find a grammer errors, hope I get to see more of ...

This was... scary, but I couldn't stop reading it! It was really good! I couldn't find any grammer errors. As some of the people have said, I think you could ...

That was great! I agree with GryphonFledging though, I think you could have made that last paragraph into several paragraphs. It would have been a little easier to read that ...

This was awesome! Not much suprise there... You should really write more! Why aren't you going to continue it? Another question, why is called the In the Deep Blue? I ...

Hmm... Ah, yes... This was interesting... I liked how it was written. But I still agree with JFW1415, you need to show us instead of telling us so much. This ...

Um... this wasn't really my kind of poem. Especially since it's written the way it is. You capitialized things that you really didn't need to. If you read it like ...

This was pretty good, since Azila alread got to the grammer errors I can't say anything about that without repeating her. It wasn't my sort of thing, but it was ...

*le gasp* I think I found what I was looking for! I used to read Errant's story "Fifteen Eternal Candles," but ever since he stopped posting that I've been looking ...

This was so...so...gah! I can't find the word I'm looking for. This was really good! I think you could have made the child sound younger, but it was still great! ...

As your first serious poem I must say it was good. I didn't find any grammatical errors and it flowed quite nicely. :) You should write more poems like this! ...

Hey ST! I think I like the other title more, but probably not for this type of story. This didn't seem very interesting. I found myself looking back down to ...