kinzygirl223

Wow. This is really good. It is very powerful. I wish i had a better critique. Sorry.

I liked it I felt like it had good feeling. Good job. I wish i could give a better critique.

Wow. Intense. I really liked it i cant wait to read the rest of it. It had a good characteristic that keep me interested. I loved it.

HMMM. Interesting. I thought that it was good. I didn't know if you were saying that the girl was a ghost or not. Who are you??? I think it has ...

I would chose the number one. i thought it was good. I wan't to see what the rest of the story is like.

I has great potentail. I cant wait to read the rest. I love your word choice. Although i wonder what is wrong with her. It was very enjoyable though.

Please review.

Very good. I enjoyed it completely. I can't wait to see what happens next. There were a couple spelling mistakes. Other than that I really didn't notice anything.

This poem is very powerful. I loved it. I felt for the person. I get a vibe that it's a girl though. So if you want to be more clear ...

i found very good. I thought it gave an amazing message. I also like the mystery of why her life sucked so bad. It's good. Sorry the review sucks so ...

I really liked it. Very entertaining. I'm wondering about the connection between David and her though. If you weren't planning on it, i would highly recommend explaining that in more ...

I thought it was good. Although it went way to quickly. If you want to write a short story, come up with a topic that won't seem rushed even if ...

Hmmm. Interesting. Good. I couldn't spot any errors either. Good job. Really Good.

I thought it was good. Very entertaining. There were some punctuation problems though. Watch out for those. I can't wait for you to write more.

i liked it it had a lot of feeling. I dont think it matters that its short i loved it.