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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Blood on my hands

    Hey. This is great. I really like the idea you created. It is like a crime story made into a poem. But I think it works well. I really like ...

    May 26, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Behind A Sheet of Glass

    Hey. This was really good. I like the idea of the window, and how it fogs. It really painted a picture of what was happening. The one thing that I ...

    May 24, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Cotton Candy

    Umm... Firstly, just want to say that this was not what I was expecting to read. But that was half of why I liked it so much. I thought it ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Needle and Thread

    Hey. I really liked this. The only thing I am wary of, is that (to me at least) it didn't flow properly. When I read it, I was reading each ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Mask

    Hey. I usually start off my reviews by saying, 'I really like this poem.' And once again, that was how I was going to start it. But by saying what ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Fragmented Reality

    Hey. This was an unusual idea, but that is one of the thing that makes it better. I like how it used the image of light and dark. It is ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Little Girl No More

    Hey. Firstly, (and I know this contradicts your name, but) I really liked this poem. It didn't have a rhyming scheme, but poetry doesn't have to have one. Some times ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Abused

    Hey. I like what you have written. It is not like most of what you see written. It is a little short though. But I've done that too. I do ...

    May 15, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: A random love story

    Hey. I really liked this. I don't normally read (or write) romance, but I really enjoyed this one. I do have one little thing to pick at though. In the ...

    May 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: El Golpe

    Hey. I like this poem. It isn't like most poems, but that's what makes it good. The only thing I have to pick at, is the second line. 'It carries ...

    May 12, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Wounded chapter two

    Hey. I really liked this chapter too. I do want to say though, that you should re-read what you have written, especial with stories, and check your grammar. There are ...

    May 11, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Wounded chapter one

    Hey. Just doing the review you asked me to do. I really like this story. It has a great idea to it, and it makes you want to keep reading ...

    May 11, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: where I belong

    Hey. This is a great poem. I like how it flowed, and you could picture what you were saying. I especially liked how your rhyming scheme worked. It was rhyming, ...

    May 10, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: McBride

    Hey. I don't know what to say, exept that I loved this story. I thought it was a great idea, and for a first try, it was a lot better ...

    May 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Three Rainbows Dancing In The Sky . . .

    Hey. I like the idea for this piece, and I like your motivation for it. The thing I have to pick at, it the way the piece is written. It ...

    May 6, 2010


The capacity of human beings to bore one another seems to be vastly greater than that of any other animal.
— H. L. Mencken