kingofwernogs

Thanks Izzie! I know I have a recurring problem with lack of detail, but untill recently I couldn't figure out how to edit a published work. I will fix it ...

Make it shorter.

???

actually, 'too' can also be used to express that something is inadequately large (too much).

By the way, great job!

*those lines

I liked how you implied a lot of things instead of trying to explain it all in the first chapter. The characters were also very deep and complicated. If this ...

This poem was amazingly written. I couldn't have done better myself. The chilling tone is reminiscent of Edgar Allen Poe's The Raven. I may well get nightmares tonight after reading ...

I like how you start off at a fast pace and give the reader colorful descriptions of your characters. However, I felt that your use of profanity could be more ...