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That was really good but I noticed a couple mistakes such as messing up names. Near the end you typed Kayla instead of Layla. I haven't watched fairy tale because ...

Well I didn't expect that, Ruin and Free. Or the adjustment to having angels in a place called ruin, and the ones whose names sound like devil live in a ...

Diabolus, that's really close to the spanish word for devil diablo. :) I was wondering if they were speaking in a fake language, or real one. Immortals, a commonly used ...

Well that was really long, but really good. Don't take my review to personally I'm only pointing out your very numerous times of falsely capitalizing things that don't belong and ...

Well this story is awesome, that said I started here and haven't read the previous chapters. I look forward to your next chapter, and would love a notification when you ...

This chapter was really good. I was under the impression Rozalin wanted Fleck dead or believed him to be already, but she saw him and didn't attack. So was Fleck ...

So to be sure I understood this right, it's about a professor of science trying to use alchemy to create something? His creation started killing? He is now heading out ...

That seemed more like something to be used in a chapter novel, or Eddie Murphy movie. Was this inspired by Dr. Doolittle? That is a good plot, but I don't ...

I would like to nitpick that you first said they kept the gun in the dorm, then that they stole it not even a day ago. That is a contradicting ...

I am not very good at reviewing most things published under the poetry genre but I will try here because it's something I relate too. I think adding a fourth ...

"Wars come and go, but my soldiers remain eternal." -Tupac War is where the young and stupid, go to fight on a figurative chessboard where the people issues orders use ...

You're breaking the fourth wall, a story character isn't supposed to know they're in a story. Chaser just said they only had one chapter for the fight, that's breaking the ...

So she twisted her ankle, ouch. He sounds more like a creep and a perv than a guardian angel, but that's just my opinion. Looking forward to where you take ...

That was... really good. It's too bad it's a short story, would have loved too see it continue. Maybe the servant takes the throne or something, its a thought to ...

Well that was interesting to say the least, I definitely look forward to where you take it. If I'm not mistaken though, her face was burned and deformed. Or so ...