justin5676

You should do away with rhyming poetry unless you're Shakespeare. It's something that I learned the hard way. I do like the idea of this. Try to put it into ...

I do like the way that you use punctuation so the reader can read the way you want them to, but you will get corrected 23042039432 times for that on ...

BLAH! You should really specify that this is about a dance (or homecoming rather). Now that you've said that, everything makes WAYYY more sense. And, by the way, I saw ...

I like this. Surprisingly, it made me want to keep reading. Not many other people on these forums have done so. One thing that I found wrong was that you ...

I like this. Although I would read this story, it does seem a bit cliche in horror movies and/or stories. Try to make it something different than dying in a ...

This is great; it's very well written, save for some very minor spelling, punctuation, and grammar mistakes. You captured these emotions greatly. It is as if it really happened, which ...

Thunder clapped and lightning bellowed. Lighting does not bellow. It is thunder that is making the noise. It sure sounds nice, but it makes no sense. Think of the flashing ...

Anything wishing you hurt That line doesn't make any sense. Also, the way you use "it's" is wrong. It should be "it's", not "its". This is kind of cliche in ...

It just doesn't make any sense. Bubblegum is a flavor of gum. To my knowledge, bubblegum can't be sour. I've never experienced that. This poem would make more sense if ...

I'm kind of confused as to what is going on. From what I understand, he is getting captured. From my understanding, "first chance at forever" means he will become immortal? ...

Juncboks- I don't really quite know what to say about this piece. Firstly, on YWS we usually steer clear from trying to explain poetry beforehand as a famous poet once ...

I really liked this story. I'm usually not a fan of these types of stories, but I enjoyed this one. There were a few grammatical and punctuational errors, though. Here ...

Love is a body, perfect like a treat. ^Uhm, bodies may be perfect sometiems, but are all treats perfect? "Perfect like a treat" Treats aren't described as perfect. Anyways, I ...

To me, it just didn't make sense. What about love being harsh and kind will make you blind? Your third line in each of the three poems has nothing to ...

The mood of the poem definitely shows in this poem. However, there are many grammatical and punctuational errors. This was done a while ago (I'm not too sure, since I ...