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Hi! This was an emotional poem and it definitely manages to convey a mood of hopelessness. I like the way you describe different feelings and how everything is repeated right ...

Beautiful and elegant :) . It took me a while to understand it, but after several reads I think I like the meaning as much as the rhythm/flow. It made ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! To begin with, I found your story concept really compelling. You made me wonder what will happen so I'm looking forward to the next chapters! Good ...

Finally I have time to review your work. I've read all the chapters posted by now and I'll say everything is going really well. The story is exciting and specific, ...

Hi! Good job, that piece picked my interest. About the technical part - I like your descriptions, you did pretty well at that. There are several mistakes here and there ...

Beautiful. Beautiful and sad. Also true, I suppose. Just few pointers. I suggest you revise the punctuation. You don't need a comma after the subject of a sentence. For example, ...

I have though about meaning of words many times. How we create certain assosiations to them and there's words that evoke certain feelings. This is not something you can read ...

To start with, this is a very beautiful piece of writing. I like what it says - "yes, the world isn't perfect at all and love is no longer what ...

It seems something good has come out of bad days. :) Your poem made me think that someone on Earth is able to get how I feel sometimes. "The blank ...