Your description of this poem was: "A Poem about suicide... like literally every other poem on here lmaoooo".
I take offense to that, being suicidal myself. Suicidal people take offense to it. Who in their right mind would think that that is hilarious? That we're laughing our *expletive* off? We don't write poetry about depression/anxiety/self harm/suicide to have others think "lmaoooo". We write it because that's our innermost personality, deep thoughts that fight to remain a secret but demand to be shared. We write it to convey emotion, and to bring out such a powerful response to such a sad and gloomy poem. We write it because in that moment, that is what brings us to our lowest point in the functionality of life. We most certainly do not generalize that every poem is about the touchy topic of suicide and we are even more certain that it is NOT funny.
This just pissed me off when I read it, and I decided to wait a day before writing this review. Because yes, I have seen many poems about mental disorders and suicide, but honestly if I had read this before looking at your poem's description, then maybe I would have found more feeling for it.
Instead, I wasn't exactly your biggest fan of this. I'm not going to go ahead and list everything that I deem wrong with this piece; I'm just ending it short. Because people who think suicide is "funny" or depression is "funny" or trying to kill yourself in different ways is "funny", or taking drugs to reach a new level of awareness is "funny", are people whom I do NOT like and will stay VERY far away from.
I am not a hostile person, especially on YWS. Congrats on posting your first poem. Oh, and 'welcome to YWS', AnnWest. Be careful of what you say.
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