jster02

This was an interesting chapter. The woman in the gutter certainly caught my attention, and I'm hoping some plot progression will come from it. The "story" about the apple was ...

Hi, I'm back! Sorry I was gone for so long, I only meant to be gone a week, but I got distracted with other things. Anyways, I enjoyed this chapter. ...

This was a great chapter, probably my favorite so far. My eyes kept growing wider and wider with each line, as I watched the butterfly zombie, or whatever it is, ...

I'd like to start out by saying that your first segment of the chapter has to have been my favorite of the three. Something about the pile of rocks really ...

I love the way you ended the chapter. It's creepy, sure, but it's a nice bit of insight into just how the virus is affecting everyone. I wonder if the ...

I'm having some trouble figuring out what's real and what's just happening in the character's heads. Some of them see things in the shadows, one hears voices inexplicably, and another ...

Alright, so it's pretty clear that everyone here is already infected by the butterfly wing virus. You did a good job of capturing how the disease is affecting everyone without ...

I never thought butterfly wings could be so scary. You've done a good job with this so far, I'm genuinely curious about what's going to happen next in the story. ...

This story feels sort of like a letter or a diary entry written by the main character. It feels like we're getting a glimpse into a real person's private thoughts ...

I've always been fascinated by the idea of freezing time. There are just so many interesting ways to use it in stories, and I never quite know what to expect ...

This story had a certain fairytale-like quality that I rather enjoyed, it reminded me of those old folktales that tried to explain why the world is the way it is. ...

This story has quite an interesting plot. I definitely didn't expect Michael to be the antagonist, but it certianly made for a more unique story. The sad thing about this ...

This story straddles the line between prose and poetry, or at least, it feels that way to me. The entire thing has a strange sense of peace about it, probably ...

Man, this hit me hard. I doubt anyone's going to object to your publishing this; writing is one of the best ways to work out these sorts of things. It's ...

There's a lot of interesting character development here. I really liked how you showed the depth of Shervan's anger at humans by having him fly away. I thought for sure ...