joshuapaul

Haus, (can I call you Haus?) I think most of the comments I made about your last poem can be asserted here. With exception to the comment about the lack ...

I have read some not-so-great poetry today. This was refreshing, you do well to evoke a clear image in the first stanza and you carry it with you for a ...

Spike, sir. Rate this 18+ shut the fuck up! appears three times, consider these strikes. (well one is enough, if you read the posting guidelines here You will find this ...

First off, Please don't 'copyright' your work. It is automatically copyrighted to begin with, but it's a little annoying and distracting. It makes the reader think about Payne rather than ...

Okay so this isn't bad, it isn't great either. I think the main issue with this is the lack of clear imagery. But, that been said, there doesn't seem to ...

I'm really not so sure about the title. I mean when I read a title like this I don't generally read the piece itself -- typically I shuffle it into ...

I'm with the others, this was lovely. I want to come back to this when I have a little more time and uproot the wee errors that blight this piece. ...

Okay, let me warn you, I'm in a harsh mood. I think I will just edit as I go and have some general notes at the end. 1016 words The ...

I'm going to review the start of this, because that's where you need to put in the most work - it's rather difficult to get through. I sat there under ...

I really do enjoy these short poems of yours. I'm not a big poetry reader, ask anybody, but I do like the subtlety of your work. And the simple lines, ...

I hate it when this happens. I read a story and I have so much to say about it, then I get to the other reviews and it has already ...

This was well written, the prose was dripping with imagery and you managed to appeal to the senses - even the yolk moon, of all things - but for the ...

originally a blog until someone said I should post it as a poem. well, here we are. the lamentation of my sorrows. joy. You should thank that someone. I'm with ...

The sky was black as night when he was waiting for her. Black as night is cliche, it is also a poor image considering you are talking about night time, ...

Ha, do you want a serious review of this? I'm not sure if I want to commit to applying a critical eye to this just yet, because like you said ...