joshuapaul

Wow, I am surprised to see how many people had only good things to say. I'm sorry but I must break the trend... Cliches, cliches, cliches... I have a writing ...

I am not familiar with the painting but I feel I could now easily recognise it. You used great imagery and the dialogue was fantastic. I respectfully disagree with the ...

This was intereting, I'm not gunna bore you with a full analysis, it seems you other critics have extacted about as much nitpicks and errors as is possible. I am ...

Hello, JP here, hope this helps! Woah, okay, first attempt at writing in present tense. The entire story will not be like this, but can you guys help me out! ...

Hey here to review. Being something of a memoir - rather than a short story - I wasn't looking for any moral or theme or general idea yet something still ...

Hey just a quick critique hope im not too harsh! I ran down the streets in my school uniform consisting of; a white blouse, red tie, red plaid skirt that ...

He ran with a pace that was justified by his fear. Not a great opening line considering the content of the piece, inroducing 'the thing' would be a better start. ...

Jp here, hope the critique isn't too harsh... Alicia sat beside her open window reading a book for school. Jane Eyre, it was called, and it was good, but made ...

Hey, hope this helps. My eyes widen surprised to hear that, "What do you mean?" I started biting my nails that are already to short. This doesn't make sense. put ...

Hello. Hope I'm not too harsh but theres a few things a proof or two would have picked up. We stood in rows, with Xenos and I side by side, ...

Where to begin... First and formost when you submit a piece for review make sure you have reviewed 3 other pieces. Now for the review. The story and themes in ...

Wow JRS you seem stubborn when it comes to accepting feedback. And you already refer to 'Fighting Fire' as 'the book' which suggests to me you believe publishers are waiting ...

I agree with the writingcat. Start a new paragraph everytime a new person speaks. You kind of got away with it in this piece but don't make a habit of ...

I don't have the time nor the energy to write a full review but I will give you a couple of tips/pointers. For a competition know exactly what the judges ...

I had to keep myself reading, I wanted to stop after the irst line but I soldiered on with no reward. This story has no plot and if it did ...