jojo48

You know, that was really good. Simple prose works for you. There wasn't anything extremely deep or sybolic in there, but the flow was lovely. It's the perfect example of ...

ONLY READ THIS IF YOU'VE ALREADY GUESSED THE RIDDLE OR ELSE YOU'RE A CHEATER AND THE RIDDLE'S NOT FUN ANYMORE!!!! So, if you've already guessed, the answer was time. If ...

Okay, sorry. I sort of made a few obvious mistakes in my review... Just letting you know I realized that.

That was really cute. I love how the story progressed. You know, it reminds me of another poem on the site called "Secret". I forget who it's by. But I ...

Sounds like a good start! I would just say, like the other replies, maybe a little overboard on character developement, but you've got a real heart for fantasy. And when ...

I really liked this! Usually poems about love actually do sound sappy, but the way you wrote this one really caught my attention. It sort of flowed in it's own ...

I didn't notice any mistakes, and I'd like to hear more. It sounds like you have a comical way of writing. The only suggestion I would make if you continue ...