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Yea, I am currently working on the 7th chapter and am almost done with it. I am planing to explain the characters personalities more in the 8th and 9th chapter ...

Thanks and I will try to incorporate a little more surrounding detail. I know that I try to let the reader mentally fill in those descriptions but I get that ...

Thanks. I found it entertaining that you said it's like Ray Bradbury's work because the only book that I have ever tried to read of his was Fahrenheit 451. It ...

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Ok :) and your welcome, the way I decide when to do plot twists is if you are getting bored your reader probably is to.

Yea I saw that. I already left a review on that one and can't wait for a new chapter. If you need any help just message I would be happy ...

Your welcome, I didn't put a lot on your second chapter but I love that you have so much description. That is often one of the main issues I see ...

Love it. I am kind of confused about what is going on with phoenix but I am not that worried about it as it's probably in the next chapter it ...

Well you can add one more person who'll review your work.

That might be interesting, she can talk to Lamar through thoughts but that's more like a psychic connection with his power than telepathy. Thanks :) that gives me some ideas. ...

Yea I noticed when I posted it that it was short but if I were to continue with the portion I wrote on the seventh chapter it would have been ...

Thanks :) I didn't notice that but I will change it.

that should say chapter 6, not 2.

Well the biggest issue I am having with chapter 2 is that I don't know where to go. I am figuring it out and about half way done with it ...

Sorry I refreshed the page and it reposted.