jennydragonlover

I agree, this poem is very beautiful. The flow of the poem seems good overall, but is compromised by the grammatical tense errors. The errors disrupt the poem's rhythm. The ...

i get those comments a lot. when I have time, i will go back and fix them. i'm thinking of doing a sequel to this. maybe the Emu: Ostrich's unrelated ...

thanks for the explanation, griffinkeeper! Just out of curiosity, what is the difference between a gryphon and a griffin? thanks a plenty![/i]

What exactly is a barrel roll and what does it look like?

thanks griffinkeeper! I'll try my best to fix the breaks. I loved your description of Chipper, oversized flying bus!

very interesting style. Hmm, no real characters...that's unusual. I'm not sure that this would be considered an actual story, but it was pretty interesting reading all the same.

very touching beginning. I really don't like sad starts but this story will eventually have a happy ending, right? Read my dragonquest excerpt if you've got time!

personally, I think that this story is veerrrrry good. Your details are very vivid. Are you considering publishing after you've finished?

How do I "break this up?" Thanks for the comment!

If you like fantasy and dragons, you should read my latest post: Second Excerpt from Dragonquest. Sorry, if it doesn't make much sense, but just give me your opinion on ...

this was very interesting reading

I found this story very enjoyable to read. Next time, could you separate your story into paragraphs? That makes it a lot easier to read. I had fun reading yours ...

Hmm... this is a very good beginning for a story. I wish that I could write an engaging lead like that. You should check out my post.....it's fairly interesting.

Thanks Misty Lynn, I'll read one of your topics one day.

This story must be really awful if no one has bothered to say anything about it. I'm really sorry if it's that bad.