jellybean

Darn it, everyone else got here before me. x) So, Lava and Grandison basically caught everything. The only other nitpick that I could find was that you use "white" a ...

So I really don't have any critiques for you. I absolutely loved this poem. It was....interesting (for a lack of better words). I thought your imagery was just mind-blowing. The ...

Hello! I thought your picture thingy was really pretty! I love the flower and the font. Which font did you use? So my main issue with this is that a ...

Okay, the reviewers before me pretty much mentioned everything. I did like the suspense you created here, however it was super, super short. This reminds me of something you'd read ...

Augh! No fair! You have to continue this! I really enjoyed this, but as Lava said, some of this got a little boring. I would've liked to see some ghostly ...

Hello! I think the idea behind this is pretty cool but you need to work on a few things. First, this doesn't seem like a first chapter to me. It ...

Hello, I'm Jelly and I shall be your reviewer today. First of all, I thought this was a little too short. You also do a lot of telling instead of ...

For some reason, the beginning reminded me of the text you might see at the beginning of a movie that lets the viewer know what's going on. x) Ahem, anyway. ...

D: Creepy picture! Okay, I've never reviewed poetry before, so please bear with me. A smile smeared on my frowning face White powder covers my dark skin Inky gunk, so ...

I absolutely love haiku too. :) I wrote a bunch for National Poetry Month because I couldn't think of anything else to write. x) I think the correct name for ...

When I first started reading this, I didn't think I would be able to get into it, but then I really started to enjoy it. You have a very powerful ...

Hello, I shall be your reviewer today! :) So I agree with Snoink about the whole proofreading thing. I didn't find anything terrible wrong with your spelling/grammar. Just a couple ...

I really liked this! I didn't find any major errors grammar/spelling-wise, so you're good there. :) I think you did a marvelous job with the 2nd person perspective. I've never ...

Hello! Nitpicks first! Soldiers marched and called out battle crys in the distance. "Crys" should be "cries". Wasn't the world ending susposed to mean land splitting and Volcanos erupting hot ...

Wooo Chapter Two! First, I'll get nitpicks out of the way. I rolled out of bed and landed in a frontward break fall . The part I put in bold ...