jeanluc

Looking good so far :P all positive! Well thank you, most appreciated.

Thanks man!

A very good story indeed, but you moved it too fast, you need to take your time to explain his surroundings...like how everyone in the prison died etc... Also you ...

ill save it for later on ;)

Wow! this is an amazing piece. I really don't have any suggestion for improvement! well done and keep writing more!

Its a funny story. I enjoyed reading it. But there is some typing errors and I advise to go over. also you've switched from present to past tense in some ...

First of all, this is an amazing text. I get the feeling that the girl is a princess who doesn't like to be one (or something like that). You've used ...