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Re: Pancakes and Parenthood
Hi Messenger!! Ollie here with a review! I love this poem, it's so short and sweet. The alliteration is a really nice touch and as the other reviewer here said, ...
Jun 8, 2025 -
Re: Cecily the candy cane clown
Hi there!! Ollie here with a review for the review day! I really like this story, it's short and sweet :D Cecily is such a lovely, cute guy, filled with ...
May 31, 2025 -
Re: Somewhere, you hold me.
This is so good!!! I adore blackout poetry, and doing it repeatedly with one sentence is such a cool idea! The gradual expansion on this character, using only the same ...
May 30, 2025 -
Re: Ode to Galatea
Hi there HildegardHope! Ollie here with a review!! I absolutely love this poem! The story of Pygmalion always did stick out to me from the myths — he agonizes but ...
May 30, 2025 -
Re: Flightless: Chapter 1
Hi there Avian! Ollie here with a review! First off, I really like the voice and the world you've built here. Athiya is a great narrator and main character so ...
Mar 12, 2024 -
Re: Oil Heads: Prologue and Chapter 1
Hi there! Oliver here with a review! First of all, what an opener - "Let’s put it this way, I didn’t want to kill Jackie Arcdale, and I knew damn ...
Jan 18, 2024 -
Re: Cold Waffles
Hi there, it's Oliver with a review!! I really love the style here, parentheses are one of my favorite devices in both poetry and prose. I feel like the emotion ...
Jan 18, 2024 -
Re: Lilac Hairpin
Ohhh this is beautiful!! "Rain is when she came to me" is such an evocative and lovely line; i really like the subtle rhyming through the poem, as well. "brown ...
Jan 22, 2023 -
Re: Perhaps
Oh my god I love Greek mythology references SO MUCH you don't even know. Hi Plume!! Oliver here with a review!! First off, I really love the allusions, as you ...
Sep 21, 2022 -
Re: The Ten-Year-Old Necromancer: Chapter Two, Part One
Hi again Horisun! First of all, I really like this chapter!! I think you definitely gave Kim a more consistent voice this chapter, if that makes sense. I think you ...
Sep 19, 2022 -
Re: The Ten-Year-Old Necromancer: Chapter One
Hi Horisun!! So I'd like to start by saying I really like the writing in this. You've given Kim a very strong voice, and the introduction is excellent, it immediately ...
Sep 17, 2022 -
Re: unmoored
Wow, this is really good! I kind of see it as writer's block, and it's a really interesting way of describing it. I honestly can't think of any criticisms at ...
Sep 17, 2022
