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Woah. The imagery in this is incredible. You blew me away. Since this is so short, I don't have a lot to say. I like the banter between Sam and ...

I'll begin with some main points: 1) I found a few really big paragraphs. All you need to do is break them up. Large paragraphs are just kind of hard ...

To begin my review, I'll start with my first impressions. 1) It's clear to me that when you wrote this the story was very close to your heart. It brings ...

I'll give my first impressions, to begin with. 1) I found some awkward phrasing in this piece. An example of this is when you wrote "much too much." I just ...

So, I'll give my first impressions first: 1) You used a lot of language that was unnecessarily confusing. I see a lot of that in sci-fi, but that doesn't necessarily ...

I'm back to do another review. I'll start with my first impressions of this chapter. 1) The dialogue is a little disjointed. It has the makings of some really powerful, ...

Storm's here to do a review. I'll start with fist impressions: 1) I found some weird grammar in this. Because of this, I was really confused by some of your ...

Okay, so first impressions: 1) You used a lot of description, which is great, but a lot of them fell flat for me. I know from your reviews on my ...

I think the idea was good. However, I'm not sure if it was executed entirely well. You begin with, "Bent double, like old beggars under sacks, cursing as we trudged ...

I think that the premise was interesting, but it definitely could have been carried out better. The story begins with a description of the prince and what he is wearing, ...

I think that this is a very emotional piece of writing. It's not bad, I think the lyrics sound good, though I think a few words could stand to be ...

I loved this story and the emotions you showed. Your style seems strong and well developed and your tendencies to mention the little details and make them important is really ...

My first impression is that we (the readers) need more information about what happened before. Getting a glimpse of the narrator's life before would really help us to understand how ...

I know I already looked at this not long ago, but I wasn't sure if you wanted help with wording. You have a great style, but they way you say ...

I think that this is definitely an improvement from the first version. I like how you expanded the more emotional scenes, though they could use a bit more work. Your ...