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Hey :) It was ok until this bit : A memory I tried to erase Like that birthday that went wrong But I still got the presents So I smiled ...

God! *prays* Lol, sorry couldn't resist. :P About the poem - very, very nice. Like V said, mellow. Calming...smooth. I do have a small problem with how 'common' these things ...

My feelings for you have gone, Banished forever as if never born, Never again shall they ever show, Lest I risk destroying my soul. Very nice. Short. But forceful. Never ...

Hey :) First off, the font you have used is hard to read. Don't let the reader strain their eyes. :) Secondly, I just want to point out a few ...

:) Lovely first poem. Let's see if we can make it better. First off, I think you've should fix the rhyme pattern. If you have rhyme you need to keep ...

Ooh, anger... lol :) Love wasn't abolished. It was [s]bloody[/s] made in sheer fantasies of bloody unions. I don't like the two bloody s. Love wasn't reaped. It was bloody ...

=) Deep. But true. This could turn into a debate if we aren't careful lol. But I like the simplicity of the sentences and how they bring so much out ...

Hey =) I think there are too many that all, this all 's int the first stanza. You don't need that repitition. But otherwise, I love the way you described ...

I like this. If You look Hard enough; far enough, You might just happen to see the Blazing stars up ahead, Gleaming, shining, Surrounding You and me I think it ...

I don't really see a solid structure for this poem. And I agree with Maki-Chan about the 'jumping around' bit. Life has changed My world is different. I told you ...

Hey :) To be honest, I don't think the title works. It's French, and long..and drawn out and I can't see anything relating it to the story other than the ...

ewk. Lol, you have a funny perception of love...I'd hate it if someone I loved came up to me and gave me this. It'd be pretty freaky. Because she is ...

Hey Well, firstly, let me point out that this isn't exactly poetry...stanzas? lines? And despite the fact that you actually have paragraphs shows that you weren't writing a poem. Why ...

Very true. Not too keen on the repitition though. I admire what you are trying to bring across. :) Good work. Peace V :P

Hey :) Nice blood. Ok, firstly. The gore is laughable. Sorry...but I think you didn't quite get the descriptive side of the blood. I don't really think this is the ...