in_too_deep

This is very beautifully written, with a strong and powerful message. well done!

Thankyou all very much for your comments, they are much appreciated :)

I liked this poem and I thought you used suitable imagery, a little confusing in some places, but nevertheless, enjoyable to read. good job :) xx

I loved this!! espescially the imagery of 'red rain' ans the shadow with no legs. I really enjoyed reading it :)

I liked it, espescially the line 'It glides through my bones' If you work a bit harder you could achieve , I'm sure, great things. Keep writing :)

Right, I've done it :)

Yaay! I'm gald you liked it and no, that quote wasn't meant to be there :) it was an accident and i dont know how to get it off now ...

you did help, thanks for the advice :) i'll work on it

i really liked it, it seems as though you put a lot of emotion into it, instead of just writing down something that doesn't mean anything to you. well done ...