in_too_deep

hi Lexy, i like it, seems like it's a very personal subject. But such a personal subject is ruined I feel from your choice of words. Something that is personal ...

It could be effective, but i also agree you definitely need to take more time with your poetry. Also, in the future if you are goin to post 4 poems ...

hmm...the rythm was a tad off in some places and the rhyming scheme kept changing. Try sticking to either freeverse or ryming couplets etc. in the future. However i do ...

I quite liked this :) It is something that i can relate to, as I'm surea lot of others can. Maybe girls more than boys. THe one thing i have ...

I thought you had some really nice rhyming couplets, but a few of them sounded as though you couldn't think of anything to say, so you used any word that ...

overall, i thought it was quite meaningful and i did like it. However, in the last couple of lines it sounds as though you dont know what else to say, ...

im very new at this and i only joined like...now, so i dont really know whats right or wrong. or what poeple are looking for in your writing, bu i ...