Parting is such Sweet Sorrow

by Araidne
  • October 31, 2006
  • Poetry
  • Lyrical

I'd rather say hello than say goodbye.
I'd raher greet, than I would cry.
To laugh, than weep.
To walk than creep.
To have a restful, peaceful sleep.
But the time does come for us to part,
Despite the breaking of our hearts.
And soon I'll be home, and soon I'll be home.
And soon I'll be at my sweet, sweet home.
Free to dance and free to roam.

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plumalicious
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plumalicious commented · Wed Nov 01, 2006 7:33 pm

Yeah, I like this! Especially the rhythm...it flowed quite well while i was reading it.
Nice work :D

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Kay Kay
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Kay Kay commented · Tue Oct 31, 2006 9:05 pm

It had a good meaning. The only part that got me just like in_too_deep said is the end. Instead of repeating yourself just keep one of those lines.

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in_too_deep
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in_too_deep wrote a review · Tue Oct 31, 2006 4:15 pm

overall, i thought it was quite meaningful and i did like it. However, in the last couple of lines it sounds as though you dont know what else to say, so you repeat yourself. other than that, good job :)



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