hhrockstarz

You really can't review this. because it doesnt have substance. Its like the baba black sheep have you any wool song. BUT who knows. maybe children of america will sing ...

Is this more a poem? Or lyrics? This is a pretty piece, you just have to determine what you are going for. (Song or not) formatting it would help a ...

This is simple, and gorgeous. Good for a nice tune.

I'm so sorry if i gave you the impression i THOUGHT you were an angry person in general. I just meant for that song i can tell you were angry. ...

Haha If you look at the end of my song, it says grammar isn't my thing. The music is.

So you need to group this better. Seperate the chorus, from the verses, from the etc. etc. It's hard for the reader to figure out what their reading.

I LOVE this, i've read a lot of your work. This piece I actually felt like I was choking. Good? YES! You showed emotion, you should pain, bravo my friend(:

I forgot to mention what I liked about this piece, I apologize. I love your rhyming, its not a simple "I'm on a boat, i like to float, gimme a ...

That was really good, you set the emotion, you had a good moral, and the beat (in my head) was stable. Good job! I enjoyed reading!

I was a really good song, i enjoyed the chorus alot. Thanks for the experience! - XoXo Leyah Grainros

I liked it alot, and with lyrics like those you could put any kind of beat or instruments to it and it would sound goood (lyrics like that are hard ...