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This is simple, and gorgeous. Good for a nice tune.
Hey Wicked!
Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.
Keep writing !
Hey Wicked!
Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.
Keep writing !
Hey Wicked!
Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.
Keep writing !
Hey Wicked!
Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.
Keep writing !
Hey Wicked!
Okay first of...
Maybe you could work on you ryming, it's ahd to try and sing a song with just words, and what has never had music put together with it is hard when the words don't ryme.
But i though the words were really strong, and it meant somthing.
Keep writing !
Hey Wicked!
Thought I'd come and do a 'lil reviewing! Anyway I'll start off with the things I didn't like.
I know that 'you' was a wanted thing with this, though I feel as if there is just to much repetition and another thing is I'm a little confused with what you're trying to say. Maybe you're screaming it out, but as a person who doesn't love in the least, I'm a little lost. But never you mind, just ignore that last part.
Another thing I found was when I try to sing it, I can't get a tune to form. All I get is this Ladaadee thing that just does not work. Maybe you should try rounding off the sentences so that a distinctive tune comes through.
I just want to mention I'm not very good at singing - and lyrics - so my advice may not be the best.
The things I like is the way you did the first part. I like how you explained some things, though I feel you could've done more.
Great Work, Keeping Going!