[Verse:]
I know it's not fair to say that we're that close
But thats just how life goes,
you come and you go
woah oh oh.
I know it's not fair to say the sun will come up
tomorow,
because I dont know,
but I don't want to
anyway.
[Hook:]
Running 'round in circles
this game of tug o war.
You say you want me in your life
but you cant be around me anymore?
[Chorus:]
I see the new you,
the one I don't wanna get used too,
the one that isn't that same sweetheart I met on the best day of my life.
Ya now I see you,
all the stuff you do,
hanging with the kinda girls you would never be into.
Ya I see you.
[Verse:]
Tell me this is a dream.
Tell me we're on a rollercoaster and things aren't what they seem.
Tell me we're all just asleep,
tell this to me.
And i'll tell you all that you wanna hear.
Baby i'll whisper my darkest secrets in your ear,
the things I truly fear.
[Hook:]
Running around in circles,
this game of tug o war.
You say you want me in your life,
but you cant be around me anymore?
[Chorus:]
I see the new you,
the one I don't wanna get used too,
the one that isn't that same sweetheart I met on the best day of my life.
Ya now I see you,
I see your new friends too,
hanging with the a people you know your not into
[Closing Verse/Chorus:]
Because this new you,
I dont wanna get used to
this new you's not the sweetheart I know.
And I want the old you,
the one who smiled lit up the darkest room,
who held me closely to his chest.
The one who knew me best,
the one I met on the best day of my life.
This is new you,
yeah I see,
you.
PS grammar isnt my thing, i would like the critics to focus on the lyrics <3
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Great song! I really like how you compare the situation to tug of war. It makes the song seem less... negative, I guess, but without losing what the song is about. I'm not really sure if that's what you were going for, but I like it! Have you put any music with the lyrics yet? Just wondering.
Anyway. Nice job.
-UCntCMee
Haha If you look at the end of my song, it says grammar isn't my thing. The music is.
There are quite a lot of grammatical errors in this song, but I think if you fixed them up it would be quite a good song.
Hey, here is my review ^^
1.
you have not specified how close you two are, so it is preferable if you use, "so close" instead of this/that
2.
you mean that's
3.
You mean to instead of too
4.
I think you mean, hanging with the people you know you're not into
5.
It is not wrong, but it would sound better if you would say, Because this is the new you,
6.
This is wrong, I think you should say:
the one whos smile lit up the darkest room.
7.
should be, This is the new you. Because "new you' isn't a specific word that means something or someone in particular.
I think this song is beautiful ^^ Good job