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Re: Death
you are extremely talented, I would have such a hard time trying to write this with only 500 words. You'de really have to use the best description at the best ...
Sep 13, 2010 -
Re: Winter to Spring
This has extremely beautiful imagery. I also really like these stanzas, and the way it seems to flow. I do have to admit that I have no idea what this ...
Sep 13, 2010 -
Re: It's About Me
I actually do find power in here. I like the confidence. Very well done. I do agree about the flow. It seems a bit uneven. I don't really mind the ...
Sep 4, 2010 -
Re: The Marble Wings
The stanza's need to be rearranged just a bit. They are a big part of poetry, they can actually create more emotion, believe it or not. I've learned this over ...
Sep 4, 2010 -
Re: You Stole Who I Am
This has lots of potential, but you are right, it does need work! I mainly chose this because of the title. Sometimes it's good to just put the meaning right ...
Sep 4, 2010 -
Re: Only Then Did I Come to You
I can't exactly get the emotion from this piece. I feel that emotion plays a very important role, depending on the type of poetry. I don't know whether this was ...
Sep 3, 2010 -
Re: Winter Fireworks
ahhh! I like this. It's great. I can feel the warmth, the joy. Imagery is one of the most important parts of poetry. You want to imagine the feeling, the ...
Sep 3, 2010 -
Re: Disrupted
I like these types of poems, they just seem to flow, they make me think for a while. I'm not as good when it simply comes to realistic poetry like ...
Sep 3, 2010 -
Re: A Single Bullet
This is very nice. Very realistic. Very emotional. It really made me sit and think. That's what poetry should do ;D I do think there should be more imagery though! ...
Sep 3, 2010 -
Re: Cup
Yet another random poem. From a year ago. Trying to get a few differently written poems up so people can get a handle on my writing style. ^^ No god ...
Sep 3, 2010 -
Re: Ferris wheel
well done ;D I really like the imagery here. It made me feel like i was in a carnival. My only advice would be to make the purpose or meaning ...
Sep 3, 2010 -
Re: An Amazing Poem
I love the title. It really defines the poem. It was green. I also really loved this line. so many people forget to put good to honest imagery in their ...
Aug 31, 2010 -
Re: It's Almost Like Winning
I don't know whether you do this or not, or if you would even want to, but it helped me. Lyrics make a real song. They are the purpose, they ...
Aug 31, 2010 -
Re: Diary
This is very simple, yet I find it very mysterious. I can feel the emotion, it's rubbing off on me. Waha. Ruin my life. my only advice would be to ...
Aug 31, 2010
