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wonderful! simply excellent. um whats a better word than that? oh well, that word! really dashing, squashed the competition like a bug! keep writing stuff like this and it will ...

brillant! really like it, has that punch or not punch but more like an oof, I dont know the word for it. oh well keep writing!

oh, its so beautiful. Im too young to understand love, but oh, I just love it. It makes me feel all fluttery inside. I think it is very beautiful and ...

really good, I got a little confused at the begging bu tI get it now. I cant wait to read more!

wow this is great, I havent read the other parts, but I am now. its really good. keep writing!

opps forgot to add the rest of the paragraph. here it is. this house was for sale, why keep the doors locked. She pondered this until she came to Dolores’s ...

I loved it! I am a girl and if I got a poem like that, it would make me happy. the simplisty of it adds to the depth. fantastic, my ...

thank for all you help guys, I really apprecate it, especially the grammer stuff.

oh yeah I know about the grammer mistakes, I hate that subject. as for the really abrupt ending, my mom made me get off because it was time for dinner ...

really good, I like it a lot. I only have one sugestion, you do use a lot or descriptive words. try to tone it down, like when describing his eyes, ...