hekategirl

This is really good, it had good flow and imagry. I don't think it needs more but it would be better with more. The last line seems like an ending ...

I agree with areida, this had no emoton in it at all. And the concept is good but you need to work on it alot.

Don't worry about the title, after you've become more used to the story and its charectars the title should come to you. But for now just work on writing the ...

The rhyming is ok if you want it to seem...not childish..but not very sophisticated. If you didn't have it rhyme it wouldn't seem that way. But I like the overall ...

That is very disturbing Emma...nice work!!! :P

I like this poem but the swering was unneccisary, don't put the swering in their unless you feel it needs it, not because you want to seem older. But I ...

This is good but you seem to be cramming WAY to much stuff into that. Like the sudden apperence of Nudith, the uncle thing, it was too much. I think ...

Love it Brad, ver nice.

I like it but to short to really comment or anything. And I agree with what Jack said about the proclamation. EDIT: Oooohhh, another girl, eh? I love it Sam, ...

Yes, yes, I ment guillotines. I am the world worst speller :D but now that thier is a spell cheaker maybe that won't happen as much :D

I agree with everyone this is great!!! and I agree with Harly's layout suggestions bt this is very nice :mrgreen:

You are very talented, this song is very, very good. It sounds great. Your voice sounds good too. I love this.

This seems more of a poem not a song. For one this you don't have a chorus. And the verses don't really flow like a song. I like it as ...

This is an ok song but I am unsure what the chorus is. Is it this: "Once i thought My life was good But then it Turned away It all ...

I like it, but I would say the same as Reichieru; I knew the 'tis's were intentional but I didn't like it. Well, I sort of liked it but not ...