Published April 19, 2005
i thought it was very good. a little confusiong, but good...are you sure you're 11?
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I like it, but I would say the same as Reichieru; I knew the 'tis's were intentional but I didn't like it. Well, I sort of liked it but not really. But it is still very good. Write more!
Reichieru you are so very honest!
For the way you told it Sam, was excellent.
If you want to get to understand it better, try reading the rest of her story. Its really good Sam! I love it! Damn you for being better than me!
I could tell it was intentional. I just didn't like it.
*cough* intentional *cough cough*
Lol. If it's really that bad, just tell me and I'll fix it.
(personally, I like it, but I am biased)
At the beginning yuo start too many paragraphs with the same word
I do.
I have the Continental army down and pat (coz they're easy, they didn't wear uniforms or decoration or anything) but this story has essentially nothing to do with them. Ho hum.
Don't worry. I can be your official British army checker if you so need
Yessssss...
thankeee Jack!
Are you talking about a British officer? I'm not sure you'd be able to tell a Colonel by his decoration, unless your character is that way. Also, the hat was actually called a bicorne if you want to be technical (and I do, for historical accuracy). If so, medals and such wouldn't be placed upon it as it would fall off too easily, so it wasn't really done.
Otherwise, it was great!