hekategirl

aparently not :D just post the one beofore this and maybe we can help.

Um....confused? I really don't see how this fits....

You sound stuck like Mesh said. WRITE MORE!

Aye, Sam i'm readin'....but this was sooooooo good, I can't tell you how much I love this, its starting to kick off I can see. But like Mesh said, you ...

YEAH! that might be it....maybe....

This is so good Sam, I can't tell you how much I could FEEL everything you were talking about. BUT MORE MUSKETS GIRL! lol sorry...

HAHAHAHAHAHA that was so fuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuunny. Ok, that isn't a word but still....... what is SS? I liked it, even though the format was that of a blind llamas... :P I ...

This is a beutiful poem, the idea of the ripples in the water is very beutiful. Thats how I would descrive this poem: beutiful.

I don't think this is bad at all, I actually like it alot. But I can't really connect everything together, its a little to vauge. And in the second stanza ...

I have to agree with everyone else, this is very, very good!!! and I can't critque.

I LOVE THIS!!! I can so relate to this song and thats one of the most inportent things in song writting I think. And it also had great flow and ...

I like Nerveim better too, and the edited version isn't as overwhelming, and I agree with Writersdomain, but more description in it.

I don't use language like that around anyone. I just use it in my poems and I say it under my breath when i'm alone, i've been in the situation ...

This is very good, it had good flow. But I agree with Kylie J, change the punctuation. but other then that it was very good.

I love this, very good. No critque.