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Re: The chaos children:Pt 1
Its OK, some of my critque on part 2 will seem kind of weird :P
Aug 21, 2005 -
Re: jetlag poetry - II
This was great, it flowed so well. The (French? am I right?) at the end was a good ending. But like liz said take out the 'The' in: "and streetwise ...
Aug 21, 2005 -
Re: The chaos children:Pt 1
I'm confused, is the second part up there sopposed to go before part 2 that you posted? its hard to keep up with stories that you post on the same ...
Aug 21, 2005 -
Re: Have you guys read these books?
Isn't Angels and Deamons the prequel to the DaVinci Code?
Aug 20, 2005 -
Re: The chaos children:Pt 1
Thats why I did it, I don't care if you use it. You should try and re-write the second one to like I did the first one.
Aug 19, 2005 -
Re: Acoustic guitars and firelight
Wow, that was greay. The title imedititly caught my eye when I saw it (Like every title should) and the poem was fantastic. This sounded a little like prose though. ...
Aug 18, 2005 -
Re: Crysi: Guilt Induced Riff with Eyeballs and Fish
This is beutiful. The words are terrific. Can't say much else but wow...
Aug 18, 2005 -
Re: Little Girl, Not a Little Girl
This was beutiful, you have a very good chance of winning, Rei. So many people can relate to this. I like how you use the same qoute at the end ...
Aug 18, 2005 -
Re: My little boy blue
I really like this poem, it was slow when you put skin in its own line, like Sam said. But this was a short, meaningful poem. Nice work.
Aug 16, 2005 -
Re: Bluebird
I really like this, the rhyming was a little forced in the first stanza but that was it. It had could symbolisom. Nice wrok.
Aug 13, 2005 -
Re: I HATE POETRY!
That is how feel right now, I HATE POETRY!!!!! :P nice work Snoink :P
Aug 13, 2005 -
Re: My First Poem
It was a good poem considering the format, you had some very good lines in there The title was good too. I like it. Nice work :P
Aug 13, 2005 -
Re: (untitled as yet) part I
For a dream this is not that confusing, it actualy sort of makes sense. All I can say is good adaptation of a dream.
Aug 13, 2005 -
Re: *sigh* Liz won't gimme any rock candy unless I post this...
FREDERICK THE EVIL BUTTER STICK!!!! er...original?
Aug 13, 2005 -
Re: The 228 Difference
Erm...where did it go....? I want to read even if you think its bad, Sam....
Aug 13, 2005
