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edit: both of you did not say that, but anyway thank you for reviewing.

i see.

thank you! both you and ripplegylf seem to be saying that the poem definitely has room to get longer.

thank you! i worried about the context, but it's generally about staying up later and later every night to adjust to a new time zone. it can get quite tiring, ...

i want this to stay on the literary spotlight for at least a year

i know that stuff about we can always improve but dude. THIS IS REALLY GOOD. so i don't have anything to review about. and i did not realize that this ...

now that i think about it, those things don't make sense; i'll go and edit them. thank you for reviewing!

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this was very, very good. short but sweet ( or maybe sour? ). i haven't quite experienced such a situation on bus rides to school myself, but i can see ...

thank you! i'll go and edit that part for the comma, but the "secondthird" is a little something i put in to indicate the passage of time, like a fast ...

i like this quite a bit. it's a sweet, funny scene.

yeah, i usually let myself capitalize things that don't make sense, erase spaces, say "goodbye" to the normal capitalization rules when i'm writing poetry. but, wow, i definitely did not ...

yeah.... i have a weird style of writing things when i'm typing casually online, that lack of capitalization even for proper nouns ( i usually only capitalize things that are ...