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Cuddle Application 4: What's the Number for 911

Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.

"A ship is safe in harbor, but that's not what ships are for."

~William G.T. Shedd

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"Molly bear," I cooed, pulling back the long, silk curtain from the window and peeking behind it. The material was thick in my hand and a hiding space just small enough to fit a young girl. Nothing.

I walked across the plush, white carpet and glanced behind the couch. Nothing there, either. Hands on my hips, I surveyed the room. She wasn't in any of her normal hiding spots.

"I'm going to find you, Mol," I said, tiptoeing on silent feet through the living room and into the kitchen. Walking around the island, I peeked into the large cabinet under the sink. An empty trash can, but no Molly. Every other cupboard was childproofed, so I skipped the kitchen and walked into the office room through an open archway, checking behind the big wooden desk.

Nothing.

"Come out, come out, wherever you are," I sang, turning in a circle. Then I spotted a rainbow-striped sock jutting out from under the wooden dining table. I grinned. "Where, oh, where could my little Molly be?"

In a quick maneuver, I jumped down, grabbing her little feet and letting out a playful monster rawr. Molly squealed, delighted, her curly pigtails bobbing up and down from between the legs of the dining chairs. I laughed, watching her chubby face get closer to mine as she crawled towards me, finally resting her nose against mine. She got so close that the focus switched and her two eyes combined into one.

She giggled, "You have one eye, Sky!"

I laughed. She plopped into my lap, playing with the silver locket around my neck. My mother came into the kitchen, her black high heels clacking on the wood, the sweet aroma of her perfume trailing in behind her.

"Sky," she started, her voice smooth and authoritative, "could you please stir the pasta while I go upstairs and change?"

My mother was a part time lawyer in a big law firm the next town over. She only worked half the week so she could stay home with my three-year-old sister, Molly, on her free days.

Today was a work day, so my mother was dressed in a tan woman's suit that she made look effortlessly beautiful in a way only her figure could. I had always wished to develop her genes, with her long, black hair and light skin. She always looked like something straight out of an old black and white movie, and the theater side of me longed to look that naturally dramatic. Instead, my older brother, James, got the dark looks, as did Molly.

The odd one out, I got my father's genes. As if on cue, he entered the kitchen from the door to the basement, giving me a smile as he walked in. "Something smells good." My mother walked over to kiss him on the cheek before she headed upstairs.

My father worked in the same Law Enforcement field as my mother, employed as a cop in the surrounding area. All of my friends tended to steer clear of my father because of this.

I was deemed a Daddy's Girl not only because of our strong relationship, but also because we looked so similar. We each had the same sloped nose and brown eyes framed with strong eyebrows. He was tall, and I didn't fall far behind, a good two inches taller than any of my friends. But the most similar, people said, were our lips, with their fullness and the point of the Cupid 's bow.

It was then that my father smiled at me and I went back to stirring the pasta noodles.

"How was your day, Sky Bird?" my dad asked, using the nickname he'd given to me as a baby.

"It was fine," I said, thinking about how un-fine it had really been. I thought of telling him of the weird blind date, but knew he'd only want to hear the back story, and decided against it. "Nothing out of the ordinary."

"Oh, your life is so boring," he groaned teasingly, leaning against the island countertop. "And, hey, have you seen your brother?"

I shook my head no, but he was most likely hanging out with his girlfriend. My brother, James, was a year older than I, and a senior at the same school I attended. When we were younger, he always ignored me or found ways to make me suffer with his endless pranks, but we'd grown a lot closer since starting high school. He was friends with Park and that was part of the reason Cora and I had gotten so close – when our older brothers hung out, we would too.

"He's probably with Ashley," my father mused, drawing the same conclusion I had. "What do you think – should we make him come home for dinner?"

I stirred the pasta. "Nah, let them have their fun before they both graduate and drive half way across the world from each other."

The thought of my brother moving to college in three short months made me sad to think about, and I was glad when my dad changed the subject. "So you really have no interesting stories to share?" he prodded.

I laughed hesitantly, uneasy by how much he was asking, and drew a shape in the condensation that was building up on the microwave from the steam in the pot below. There was no way he could possibly know, but then why was he so curious? "Nope," I said. "Nothing."

"You liar!" he said, throwing out an accusatory pointer finger and laughing. "You think I don't know?"

My heart rate sped up. He couldn't know – there was no way. I lifted the corner of my lips, trying to smile as a way to distract my father from whatever conclusion he'd discovered. However, maybe he being a cop allowed him access to special search engines, resulting in him finding my drunken profile.

I bit my lip nervously.

"Your SAT scores came in!" My dad finally exclaimed. "Did you honestly think I wouldn't find out?" I let out a sigh of relief. I'd totally forgotten the test scores had been released that morning. I'd been so distracted at school that I hadn't even bothered to look. "We'll have to look up what you got later and start looking at some college options." His brown eyes gleamed with hope. James was smart, so much so that he was going to graduate at the very top of his class. My parents had just as high hopes for me, and I didn't want to disappoint them.

"Yeah, for sure," was all I said. Relieved that my impromptu date earlier that day was still a secret, I allowed myself to relax. "So what did you do today, Mr. Cop, Sir?" I asked my dad.

He went on to tell a story about a man in the jailhouse that didn't speak English and spent his days writing swearwords with his fecal matter on the floor of his cell. A lovely story, really. I continued helping with dinner, Molly crawled over and ended up in my father's arms, and eventually my mother came back down dressed more casually. We ate dinner and by the end of the night, I was cooped up on my bed, surrounded by blankets, and pulling out my homework.

My calculus was screaming to be completed, but the sound was pretty easy to ignore over the sound of cell phone notifications. I unlocked my phone screen, met with an inbox full of seventy three messages. Rolling my eyes, I knew most of them were most likely my group chat with Cora and Lina.

I clicked the text box and read message after message of them asking questions about my date. Lina apologized for the deception and Cora decided that she, however, was not sorry for setting me up with "the delicious eye candy." And so it went on scroll after scroll. The most recent text read, "I think Skylar might be dead," written by Cora. I began typing.

Me: I'm not dead

Cora: Thank GOD. Are you still being a lil hoe and being mad at us or are we good?

I thought about it. Yes, the day had been incredibly stressful, but at least it was over. Besides my short choking episode, no harm had been done and I really just wanted to forget the whole thing ever happened. I hadn't met Oliver prior to that day, and I probably would never see him again, so there was no point in dwelling on it.

Me: Ugh, I guess. But because of the emotional trauma you caused me today, I'm going to need you to send me the calculus homework, por favor.

Leaner: Yay! We are forgiven!

A picture popped up of Cora's math homework and I started copying it down, responding periodically while Cora and Lina talked. The sun had gone down and the moon casted an eerie glow through my window. I reached over to the nightstand next to my bed and switched on the radio, bobbing my head to the pop music that came on.

Cora and Lina wanted to know everything that had happened at Fran's – every word spoken, every slight pause, every intake of air. I gave the simplest of responses.

Cora: Ugh, Skylark, you're no fun. We want details!

I was in the middle of responding when my phone rang, the shrill ringing interrupting the Twenty One Pilots song that was playing. The screen went from a white text box to black, with green and red buttons, giving me the option to accept or decline the call. I didn't recognize the number right away.

"Hello, this is Sky."

Expecting a friend from school, or a prank call, or even a robotic voice calling about some sort of election, I was beyond surprised when a male voice spoke. "Oh, I'm sorry," he said. "I think I have the wrong number. I'm calling for a girl named Sorry – know where I could reach her?"

Time stopped. I blinked once, twice, three times. My heart was beating in my chest, so hard I thought for sure it was going to hop right out of my ribcage.

"Hello?" came the voice from the speaker.

I pulled the phone away from my ear and threw it across my bed, the screen landing face down on my comforter. I took a sharp intake of breath and held it, not sure what to do. My eyes blinked to the left and to the right, not sure if this was real. My phone was five feet away already but that wasn't enough, so I tucked in my legs and slid until my back hit the headboard.

It was Oliver.

I finally exhaled.

But it couldn't be.

His name filled me with unexplainable terror and annoyance – a strange combination along with the thoughts swirling through my brain.

How was he calling me? How had he gotten my number and how – who – why was he calling?

What did he want?

I stared at the phone, listening to the blood pump through my ears. This had to be the work of Cora. She just couldn't help herself. She hated my boyfriend so much that she had to go to this length of setting me up with someone else.

Anger burrowed itself in my chest. I could make my own choices. I'd said I didn't want anyone else, especially not Oliver, and yet there he was on the other end of the phone.

I could hear a faint "hello?" on the other end of the phone, muted by my blankets. I bit a fingernail, trying to decide whether or not to answer. In the short time I had met Oliver, I already knew he wasn't the type of person to just go away. Ignoring him was not going to make him stop.

I sighed and allowed myself to inch forward, getting closer and closer to the phone until I was almost on top of it.

"Sorry, are you there?"

I picked up the phone in two pinched fingers, like it was a piece of smelly garbage. Finally, I took a deep breath and put it back up to my ear. "What?"

"Oh thank God," Oliver exhaled. "I thought for sure you'd passed out from excitement."

I made a face. "What?"

"It wouldn't be the first time someone's fainted over the excitement of getting a call from yours truly."

My mouth fell open. I'd almost forgotten how cocky he was. I wasn't even sure what to say, but I was definitely starting to regret ever answering his call. "Why are you calling me? No, better yet, how are you calling me?"

There was a short laugh on the other end and Oliver took a deep breath before saying, "You see, Miss Short Bus, there are these things out now – you may be familiar with them – called cell phones. Now a cell phone –"

"I know what a cell phone is," I snapped, blushing. "And my name is Skylar. Not Sorry, not Miss Short Bus, not anything – just Sky."

The phone was silent for a moment on the other end. I rubbed the bridge of my nose and closed my eyes. Boys in general were frustrating, but this one – this one was a flat out pain. Oliver didn't answer at first and I wondered if he'd hung up the phone at my little outburst. I hoped that was the case. Not everyone could handle the signature Skylar sass.

Then, much to my dismay, Oliver spoke. "Okay, I'm confused, is it Skylar or Just Sky, I don't know, you're giving a lot of options and I just want to be clear –"

I held back an angry scream that was threatening to burst through. "Okay," I interrupted harshly. "I'm done. Goodbye, Oliver, please do not call me again –"

"No, no," he said, sobering, "I'm sorry. I'm sorry. I got too carried away, and I actually did call for a reason, I promise. I'll answer whatever question you have, just please don't hang up."

I paused. I hadn't expected him to say that. Hearing him apologize was almost worth the torture – but not quite. "You're sorry?" I repeated questioningly.

"Yes, I'm sorry."

I bit my lip. Don't do it, Sky, don't do it. I paused. "I thought I was Sorry."

And then Oliver started laughing a laugh that crawled up my back and warmed my whole body. It started soft and slow, the kind of laugh you give to a knock knock joke, before it grew louder and stronger until he was laughing so hard that he must have taken the speaker away from his face to do it. I couldn't help but smile as he laughed and I had to remind myself to stop.

I had never before heard a laugh quite like his.

"Wow," he said after he'd collected himself. "She does have a sense of humor."

The corner of my mouth turned up.

"Okay, back to the topic at hand," Oliver said, "now that you've forgiven me. I'm calling to invite you to a party this weekend. Consider it our first date."

Just as quickly as my smile appeared, my mouth straightened back into a line. I sighed. "Oliver, I told you already, I have a –"

"Boyfriend?" he finished, stopping me. "So you've said, but just because there's a goalie in the net don't mean you can't score, baby doll."

I didn't even bother correcting him with my name. I tapped my bottom lip, deciding.

"What kind of party," I asked slowly.

He chuckled. "The only kind kids our age go to." And that answered the question well enough for me. It'd be at a big house, the parents gone on some sort of vacation, booze stocked to the ceiling. Cora and Lina would kill me for turning down an invitation.

I debated. "Who's hosting it?"

"Another kid from Pemberson."

He'd said "another kid," confirming my suspicion that he also attended the school rival to mine. I knew he didn't go to Helaci High, but before, I hadn't been certain he even lived in Helaci.

"Okay," Oliver said after a pause. "You don't have to go with me. You can go those nice friends of yours, or even this mysterious boyfriend who's probably fake and probably from Canada." I was about to say something about the realism of Canadians when he spoke again. "Just come."

I debated. What could be so wrong about going to a party? I'd be with my friends, and maybe Josh would want to come. I wouldn't even have to speak to Oliver – wouldn't even see him if the party was like any of the other ones I had been to recently.

Take a risk, part of me was saying. Don't play it safe.

"It could be fun," I said slowly. Oliver started cheering and I cut him off short. "But this isn't a date, and I'm not going with you. In fact, I will be avoiding you at all cost."

"That's alright, Princess," he said. "I'll just have to break out my grade A Bear Level Boy Scout detective skills to find you."

"You won't," I stated, confident in my skills of going unseen. "But in case you can't find me, I'll give you a clue: I'll be hiding behind a tall, attractive guy who's neither fake nor Canadian."

"It won't be very hard to find you if you're standing behind me, Baby Cakes."

"Ha ha," I deadpanned. "But I was actually talking about my – "

"Boyfriend," he finished. "I'm aware. But even he can't ruin my good mood. See you Friday." And then he ended the call.

I immediately groaned. This time, it hadn't been Cora and Lina that got me into a mess with a boy named Oliver – this had been all me. I regretted agreeing to the party almost as soon as I lowered the phone from my ear. I'd gotten too caught up in challenging Oliver – too busy trying to prove I had someone else, that I walked blindly into the trap he'd set.

But maybe the situation wasn't all bad. The silver lining being that maybe Oliver could finally be knocked into place. Maybe if he saw Josh and me together he'd finally realize how hopeless it was to pursue me – for whatever strange reason he was doing it to begin with. All I knew was that I couldn't back out. I was going to end this once and for all, and there was only one way to do it.

Well, I thought, I guess I'm going to a party.

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Carlito
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Carlito wrote a review · Sat Sep 10, 2016 1:54 pm

Hello hello! Happy RevMo! :D I apologize that I haven't read the previous installments of this piece, so I'll be looking at it as a part of a greater whole.

I'll start off by saying I really enjoyed reading this. Having zero context for what's going on and who these characters are, I still felt really intrigued and drawn in by these characters. I felt like I was able to keep up and also get a sense of who these people are and what they're like. An impressive feat when a reader is coming into the story late and is reading a chapter cold!

One thing that distracted me just a touch was in the first part of the chapter you hit us with a few info-dumps about her family situation. Like:

My mother was a part time lawyer in a big law firm the next town over. She only worked half the week so she could stay home with my three-year-old sister, Molly, on her free days.

Today was a work day, so my mother was dressed in a tan woman's suit that she made look effortlessly beautiful in a way only her figure could. I had always wished to develop her genes, with her long, black hair and light skin. She always looked like something straight out of an old black and white movie, and the theater side of me longed to look that naturally dramatic. Instead, my older brother, James, got the dark looks, as did Molly.

I think the first paragraph is all we need to know about the mother at this exact moment. It explains who she is and why she's in the scene right now. I'm not sure we need to know everything else at this exact moment. You start to fall into a pattern of having dialogue and action and then a paragraph telling us about someone in the family or what the situation is, and then going back to the dialogue and action. Dialogue and action is obviously way more exciting to read (and you do a nice job with it!) I think throwing in the explanations distracts from the scene and breaks the momentum. It's fine to throw in those little details (like that first paragraph), the rest will come out naturally if it's important.

I thought seeing this MC's interaction with her sister was sweet and with her friends was fun. Her actions and emotions and reactions felt really authentic to me. And then we get to Oliver. I'm really into this guy. He is one of types of book-boys that I really go for - the overly confident smooth as hell guy. Like this line:
"So you've said, but just because there's a goalie in the net don't mean you can't score, baby doll."

I'm absolutely dying over this. <3

I don't have a lot of criticism for this specific chapter other than the little info-dumps in the first portion of it. I think the majority of this chapter is on point and I'm going to have to put this title on my list because I'm super, super curious to know how Oliver entered the picture when this girl already has a boyfriend, what the boyfriend thinks of this (if he even knows :o), and what this girl is going to do next. (I'll be honest, I'm already rooting for Sky + Oliver). If you're interested in me reading more, I can start to provide some larger scale feedback on the plot and character arcs as well. It's hard to do that when you come into a chapter cold.

Keep on writing this and let me know if you have any questions or if anything I said was confusing! :D

I updated this story and added a 5th chapter. I would love for you to read it if you could because you gave such a wonderful and helpful review on this chapter :)

Awesome! It's on my list :D

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Hey, I'm here to review! :D

The material was thick in my hand and a hiding space just small enough to fit a young girl.


There's no grammatical error in this sentence, but as I read, I feel like there's something missing for the second part of it. 'The material was thick in my hand' in the first part seems to demand 'a hiding space behind it was just small enough'.

Walking around the island, I peeked into the large cabinet under the sink.


Er, after seeing the location, I doubt there's an island there. >.> I think you're referring this to a table or something? If so, it's better to make it clear.

Instead, my older brother, James, got the dark looks, as did Molly.


The description of Sky's mother is nicely done, but I'm not sure 'dark' is the best way to summarize it. I mean, even if she has a dark hair, she still has a light skin, so, um, more brevity?

I shook my head no, but he was most likely hanging out with his girlfriend. My brother, James, was a year older than I, and a senior at the same school I attended. When we were younger, he always ignored me or found ways to make me suffer with his endless pranks, but we'd grown a lot closer since starting high school. He was friends with Park and that was part of the reason Cora and I had gotten so close – when our older brothers hung out, we would too.


Yeah, I'm going to talk a bit of this paragraph. It contains information that I think doesn't need to be revealed right now, or that can be weaved in as the story goes? I don't mind this until the part about James being friends with Park, and that it's the reason Cora and Sky get along together - that part can be shown rather than told.

However, maybe he being a cop allowed him access to special search engines, resulting in him finding my drunken profile.


Oh lel. So far, there's not much humour, but this one just breaks that down. Seeing what's happening, I can understand the lack of it.

He went on to tell a story about a man in the jailhouse that didn't speak English and spent his days writing swearwords with his fecal matter on the floor of his cell. A lovely story, really.


The variants of humour. xD

My calculus was screaming to be completed, but the sound was pretty easy to ignore over the sound of cell phone notifications.


'sound' is repeated twice. I always use 'one' to substitute something, so perhaps you can use it switch the second 'sound'?

Me: Ugh, I guess. But because of the emotional trauma you caused me today, I'm going to need you to send me the calculus homework, por favor.


I checked the meaning of por favor because I thought it might be a typo (per favor?) but sounded familiar. I found out it was Spanish for 'please', which is suitable to be used here. What I wonder right now is that, does Sky learn Spanish? Does she have Spanish heritage in her blood? Maybe that is worth to explore if it's the later, but if it's the former, um, just say so, I guess. xD

I gave the simplest of responses.


And I expect to see it! xD You've built up the tension, and so I feel like I'm cheated as a reader because I don't see what's the 'simplest of responses' (not to mention it's vague).

"Hello, this is Sky."


No! You got a call from a stranger! Don't tell him your name! It's rule number when receiving a call like this! D: Now he knows he gets the right victim for his next blind date. ;)

I bit my lip. Don't do it, Sky, don't do it. I paused. "I thought I was Sorry."


*gasp* Don't, Sky, don'! D: You're falling into his trap! xD As you can see, I think the highlight of this chapter has to be the exchange both of them is having, because it brings more of the delicious humour I expected from you, and ignore what I said about this chapter lacking humour! I think it has just the right amount of humour to keep me engaged in reading it.

Done reading this, and I'm very much intrigued! I seriously love it that the reason Sky's going there is to end the matter between her and Oliver, because I though it would be about 'starting something' between them. I'm pretty much relieved that she still considers her boyfriend Josh as someone who could knock Oliver's out.

But Oliver is an interesting character, far more interesting than Josh who I haven't met yet (maybe because I only started reading this novel at the chapter which I reviewed first). I want to root for Sky and Oliver, but until the dilemma that she has a BF is settled, I'm not going to encourage cheating. Perhaps the party would reveal the best - or worst - side of each boy, who never knows?

Also, one thing that I'm curious about is the reason Oliver's so into Sky. I'm not sure if I missed something, but I fail to see what is it in her that attracts him. Not that she doesn't have any winning points, but it's not stated clearly what makes Oliver does this to win her heart. Perhaps I'll know later on, but until I do, me rooting for them to be together is not going as strong as it could be.

For a romance that pretty clear has a love triangle, it would be so much interesting to have both Josh and Oliver compete for Sky, in the sense that they're both good guys, and it's just a matter of who fits more with her. I'm not saying she's a prize or something, I'm just annoyed with a story in which one of the boys/girls is truly annoying and evil that we just know which pairing is better.

Anyway! That is all! Keep up the good job! :D

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heath
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i know that stuff about we can always improve but dude. THIS IS REALLY GOOD. so i don't have anything to review about. and i did not realize that this was chapter four so i am going to read all of the other chapters right now

Thank you! I appreciate it :)

I added another chapter if you were interested in reading more :)

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Remington38
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Hello Remington38 here for a reveiw.

Um please write more! I saw this in the green room and saw it was a part four and it sounded interesting so I made the fantastic decision of reading it from the beginning. Ahhhhhh please write more. I honestly was completely sucked into this world and couldn't take my eyes off the screen reading this. I feel like this would be a book I would find in Barns and Noble. It was exciting and a definetly amazing teen read. Once I started I went to the next entry then the next I couldn't stop. I didn't want this to end. This would make an amazing novel. You are a wonderful author and a very gifted writer.

This made me so happy XD thank you so much for taking the time to read my story. Your opinion means a lot and I'm really glad you liked it! I'll let you know when I add another chapter :)

(I actually update this more often on Wattpad.com so I don't know if you're on there but my user is @Linguistic- and the story is there too if you're looking for more of this sooner :))

I just added a chapter 5 :) I'd love if you could read it

Yes!!!!! I am honestly really looking forward for it!



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— Genesis 3:19