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Re: Stepping onto Solid Glass
Hi, haredrier here to look over your story like you asked. I can't say much about the narration or anything like that since it's a real memory, but there are ...
Oct 7, 2016 -
Re: Rise of the Accused [UNFINISHED]
Haredrier here with a review to help kick off RevMo! I liked the concept used here, but there are a few issues I found with the writing. Firstly, there are ...
Sep 1, 2016 -
Re: I'm Sorry, Father.
Haredrier here for a review. Overall the writing was quite good, but there were a few things I felt were off about the work itself. First of all, the source ...
Jul 15, 2016 -
Re: The Case of Schadel Kueper: Chapter 3
Haredrier here for the final review in the trilogy, although there will be more installments if you upload more and request them. Not much happened in this chapter and I ...
Jun 28, 2016 -
Re: The Case of Schadel Kueper: Chapter 2
This is Haredrier, here to review another chapter. Overall this chapter added a good amount of intrigue to the story and I appreciate that, but I still feel like it ...
Jun 28, 2016 -
Re: The Case of Schadel Kueper: Chapter 1
Haredrier here to comment on your work as requested! Firstly, I must say that I enjoyed reading this, and most of the issues have been mentioned before by other reviewers. ...
Jun 28, 2016 -
Re: Chapter 1
Haredrier here for a review! I'd say your story has it's moments, but overall needs some work. Firstly, the thing about your story that strikes me as the biggest problem ...
Jun 26, 2016 -
Re: Warrior Song
Haredrier here for a review! I really like the lyrics, they remind me of Amon Amarth (the song "For Victory or Death" in particular). There's a part where there the ...
Jun 12, 2016 -
Re: Quest for Fire Book Two ~ Frozen Past Chapter 14
I really enjoyed reading this protion of your story. While I haven't read the other parts of your story, I really like the premise of an intelligent dragon-filled universe. The ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Boss vs. Beast
While I am a fan of crime/ gangster stories, there were quite a few things that I found off-putting about this story. Firstly, there are a large amount of grammatical ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Black Tulip Society
Great work on the story, the premise is quite interesting and I would like to read more about this story/ universe. However, there are a few things I'd like to ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Yoga Sucks
This story so far is interesting, and quite well written. However, I have a few issues with it. Firstly, I feel like the formatting could use some work. Seperating the ...
May 23, 2016 -
Re: Blood and Fire
I like these lyrics, they feel like they're written from the heart and are down-to-earth. I know the theme and lyrics are completely different, but I couldn't help but think ...
May 21, 2016 -
Re: Everlasting Life
The writing style is very nice and it offers a lot in the way of chracterization and emotions. To be honest I really liked this story so far, and I'd ...
May 21, 2016 -
Re: Novel (first page)
I quite liked your story so far, but I'm not sure if I would continue to read it for several reasons. Firstly, there doesn't seem to be any characterization of ...
May 21, 2016
