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Re: Why won't it end?
Hi!! Very good golden details, I can vision the girl in my head in the beginning paragraph. Her skin is as cold and white as ice, her precious shallow breaths ...
Wed Nov 04, 2015 4:38 pm -
Re: rebelling
Hi! The idea of your poem is great- it shows the relationship a girl has with her father deeper than what is on the outside. What I got from the ...
Tue Oct 27, 2015 6:07 pm -
Re: dear you.
Hi! I LOVE the format of your poem. It shows the struggle of these words being said on paper. The isnt it funny how words lose their meaning when you ...
Tue Oct 27, 2015 3:44 pm -
Re: The Quote
Hi!!! I love how you open up your story with a simile. The dark clouds spit out cold beads of rain in such way that I feel like nails are ...
Fri Oct 23, 2015 3:43 pm -
Re: Sunflower
Hi! I thought this piece was really good but I do think that there could have been some changes in the way that it was written. I think you got ...
Mon Oct 05, 2015 5:34 pm
