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Ooo, enjoyed much! The short stanzas did seem abrupt at first, but once I got into the rhythm of them they really flowed. I know I've felt this way before; ...

I'm sorry, Myth, I only got to the first chapter so far, so please forgive me. Very intriguing I must say, only a few suggestions. He was the first spiritual ...

Hey, Pros! Sorry it's taken me so long to get here, and I'm afraid it shall be longer still before I can do a full crit. Just read the first ...

Muchmuchmuchmuchmuch better! You did an excellent job of getting rid of your -ing phrases soft spot, a very good job. Now, onto that comma's soft spot: Rising bitterly, white flashed ...

Dahling, I am here to save you from the depths of despair! You. Are. Fantastic. Amazing-Wonderful-Incredible-Marvelous-Glorious; Chiar of Wind and Darkness is one of THE best books (yes, I said ...

Okay, please don't hurt me: you asked for it!!! And remember, I crit because I care. Really! I wouldn't have spent so much time on it if I thought it ...

I loved it. It gave me a special, tingly feeling inside, like the kind you get sitting in front of a gentle fire on a winter night, with the snow ...

Loverly, dahling, a nice O. Henry-like twist there at the end. :-) I do have a...few comments. Remember, I crit because I care! on such an occasion should be "in ...

Dahling, it's fantastic. I really enjoyed reading it, I think there's great potential for a novel there. In all honesty, I couldn't even tell that Engish wasn't your first language, ...

Totally with you, Sohini. Terry Pratchett rocks!!! But I'm not qute as...defensive of him as certain other authors here. He's a great writer, and if people don't agree with that, ...

Yay! I've finally come to post on some of DD's stuff, who has been sooo nice in posting on mine. Really awesome poem, Dreamy, love the imagery and everything. One ...

wow. I mean w-o-w . dude. Um, okay, I came here with the purpose of reading some of your stuff, since you've been so kind in reading mine, and now....yeah, ...

Hallelujah! Sage has finally posted! And it's a scene between Kali and Galwyn, how wonderful! (Galwyn very much) Dearest Sage, you asked for a crit so here it is: almost ...

Haha! This is fantastic, I love it! Only one thing jumped out at me (and I was looking for jumping things, I always do when I really like a piece): ...

I really enjoyed this book as well. The beginning was, naturally, a tad cliche, but it didn't put me off so much from reading the rest. Personally, I found Max's ...