gymnast_789

Ha ha! I loved it! Like other before me I too read this while listening to Poker Face on my iTunes. Thanks for the laughs! Great video also...

Hey Navita, I'm not very experienced with writing short stories, so thanks for the suggestions. Now that I re-read and think about the ending, I have to completely agree with ...

Thanks for all of the suggestions! I'll make sure to fix those things in my story.

Thanks everyone!

Yeah this acctually happened. This is going to be a story about me, and my life in gymnastics.

Very good. I enjoyed this beginning much better then your first draft! It drew me into the story and made me want to keep reading more! :D You should take ...

Neat! I really like it, it has really good discriptions. :D

Short...but I like it!

I really enjoyed this. You have a lot of good descriptions in this. I also like the way you have the lines.

Really good! I liked the ending the best.

I like it, but I think that it could use a little something more, to make it more interesting, and so the reader can get a better image of it.

And since he seems more like his mother's favorite than his father's favorite, why not have a beaming mother behind him when the egg comes instead of his father? For ...

Thanks order! I'll make some changes that you suggested!

Continuing from Part 1 ^_^ The freshly fallen snow crunched under my feet as I jumped out of my mothers car. The winter morning air was cold and fog covered. ...

This is the first one...I'll post chapter 1 doesn't really have anything to do with this chapter.