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This is really excellent. There are a few things that I feel should be changed in the first two paragraphs. There are definitely no big mistakes it just has to ...

This is a very telling piece. I understand you point of view perfectly. I am under the general assumption that, if you compare and contrast your ideals with a different ...

She didn't think in any way it was funny to tease someone just because they had a flat-chest. -Re-write this sentence or add a comma The door was softly shut, ...

Awesome stuff. There should be more writing like this that are made into movies. I know movies are not a readers friend, but SciFi like this is still lack in ...

I am not sure how any is being touched. Is a ghost touching the main character? If so it doesn't seem to come off that way. I personally find that ...

Wow. I'm impressed. I actually felt like I was in the room. There were even time when I was both of the characters and then snapped to third person. Great ...

This is a beautiful piece of writing. It is heart-felt. It conveys a message. It leaves you thinking. You wrote where instead of were in the 12fth line from the ...

I am not going to lie the title captured me. I honestly was expecting something else to read entirely. I was surprised to find that I was content to keep ...

This has great potential. I learned from my English teacher that simple words like "sound" can often be more descriptive words like: rushing or blistering. Rather than saying "The sound ...