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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Samson's Testimony

    I'm sort of confused by this poem. Especially in the line, "Where's my hair?" I sort of got most of the poem, but when I got to the last line, ...

    Jan 13, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: A Piece of Me

    I like the idea of this poem, told by a trusting person, who, no matter how many times they have their heart broken, continues to entrust it countless times to ...

    Jan 12, 2014
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Other Re: Static

    I forgot one more thing: I think you switch tenses consistently throughout the piece, from present to past and back again. Choose one, and then change the words in the ...

    Jan 11, 2014
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Other Re: Static

    I really enjoyed this story, with these little hints placed carefully along the way, just enough so I had it figured out by the revealing line. The anecdotes are really ...

    Jan 11, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Red, Yellow, and Blue

    Great poem! You really gave a whole new insight about fire, and it was a fantastic one! In this line: Pink as blushing cheek I think you should make it ...

    Jan 8, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Birdbath Wishes

    I love poems where it's shaped as an important symbol from the poem! I really enjoyed this, mostly because this happens to everyone. There is always something that as a ...

    Jan 5, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Insanity

    I like the word choice of this poem and how it is written, but I don't really understand it. The moon warms up your smile. The sun cools down your ...

    Jan 5, 2014
  • Short Story » Other, General Re: Off the Edge

    Normally stories about suicide attempts are dark and creepy (at least to me), but I think you captured more of its reality, which I liked. I noticed how the other ...

    Jan 5, 2014


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