freedomgirl

I like the end "they weren't" a simple short sentence ends the story without any complex, I really like the story and nice work in showing the stress and the ...

thaaankk youuuu, I know that my grammar is very weak, I'am still trying to improve it ut I don't know how. Any ideas??

thanks for the help I really appreciate it, I know I still have so much to learn, thanks for the advices :)

okay, your story was good not great but good I like it because it has so many actions and details however I'm not sur about the end,because you dIdn't give ...

i realy really like the story and your way of writing also the words of describing however it was going to be much better if you describe your people more ...

nice job i like your way of writing and don't worry you will be better more and more with every day so don't give up and i have to say ...

mmmmmmm good question, i guess it's just a feeling that we feel like happiness and sadness it's true that anger makes life complecated but it also make it intresting, imagine ...

thank yo so much for the tips and i will try to write better, i hope i will succeed :)

thank you maddy and thank you claire and it's okay i just start writing and sorry that my story bored you but i will be better,just give time and you ...

thank you and you have right....thanks again

thanks for the tips i will try to write better :)

short but really beautiful nice work