filmcanister

have you read "god of small things" by arundhati roy? she does the stringingwordstogetherthing. it won the booker prize. very good text if you have not yet picked it up. ...

the final "he" stands out way too much. i really like the way you've broken the rest of it up. he / numbs, he /holds, etc. however, this last "he" ...

perhaps i'm just a lovestruck shmuck, but i want to know more about liberty. hehe. battleground attractions - dangerous in military times. i want to know why she is at ...

well, where does one draw the line between romantic love and a desperate sexual attraction? that's what i would have answered. romantic love is all about sex. you can have ...

i enjoyed it. perhaps you could elaborate on the different elements a bit more. y'know, earth, fire, water, and air, the latter of which didnt get any mention at all. ...

My arms are colder than that time you touched me with your this is awkwardly broken up because what i think at first is that your arms are colder than ...

Little girl, did you not hear? I need you close, I want you near! honestly. all i can think of with those two lines is child molestation. With worry I’m ...

your opening made me think of a beating heart. this idea should be carried on throughout the rest of the piece, because it can work in so many ways. generally, ...

i honestly can't figure out why you opened with "yay." it's distracting. what would be funny is if you capitalized Whole, and left half un-capped. if you came third, you'd ...

good meter most of the time. first stanza is slightly irregular; perhaps drop two in the second line or add some to the first, and keep the beat through the ...