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Re: Coffee
Heyhey, ChipMcCoy! Awesome wisegirl22 here to review Coffee. Hehe, that sounds weird. First, some nice words. This was beautifully fluent, great, careful planting of those break ups. A bit more ...
Jul 28, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 14: The Attempt
Hey. Wisegirl22 here for Plasma. Okay, way in the story, you don't have to capitalize "Hyena". "dying Hyena." And capitalize the l in "let's". "running his hand through his hair, ...
Jul 28, 2014 -
Re: Black Eyes Book 1: The Seventh Spirit Chapter 10: The Sludge
Hey. Wisegirl22 is here to help Team Plasma. Go us! But Team Aqua is beating us by 8,000. Okay, first thing on. Never, ever put like in stories. Just plain ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Second Always Comes Last: Cross Cutter
Hey, Blackwood, here to help our team prevail! Okay, the first thing you wanna do is get rid of all the capitalizations. Like here: "NOTHING justifies murder!" I think you ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: REDACTED
Hey, TiggaBiscuit. Wisegirl22 here for a friendly review. Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Team Plasma For The Win Review Day! I really wish we weren't third place with second place 6,000 ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: She Will Be Judged: Chapter 6
Hey Legibletext, this is wisegirl22 on the hopelessly losing team, Team Plasma. Unhappy Ultimate Pokemon Un-awesomeness Team Aqua Is Winning Review Day. Here, in this sentence, I think you meant ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: TFoA - Chapter 9
Hey, LeftyWriter. Wisegirl22 here for an annoying review. Good job writing this, this was awesome. More praise later. (You belong in the Green Room!) In the beginning, I think this ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Last Stand Chapter 1 The Hole in the Sky (Reframed)
Hey, wisegirl22 here for Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Team Plasma For The Win Review Day. In the beginning, I believe "your" should be "you're". "Let me know when your ready." ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Wool of the Prince-- Chapter 17
Hey, fortis, Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Team Plasma For The Win Review Day!!!!! Some errors. There's supposed to be a comma after "Well". "Well it doesn’t matter where he is," ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: My Ideas Part 2
Hey. Happy...ULTIMATE POKEMON AWESOMENESS TEAM PLASMA FOR THE WIN REVIEW DAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Okay, first, maybe cliched, but your wording. "which i
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: felo de se
Hey, EmeraldEyes, Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Team Plasma For The Win Review Day! About time, my friend. So first, in the first line, "ok" should be "OK", or "okay" if ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: My ideas for my stories
Pinkiegirl13. We meet again. *attempts creepy voice then explodes* HAPPY ULTIMATE POKEMON AWESOMENESS REVIEW TEAM PLASMA FOR THE WIN WEEEEEEE DAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Okay, you might've made a typo
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: For Somebody That I Know And Love And Will Continue To Know And Love
Heya, MasterGrieves, Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Review Plasma For The Win Get Ready To Be Crushed Day! I hope ya' aren't on Team Aqua, or any team besides mine, in ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Love strinks~Part 1
Hey, awesome wisegirl22 here for reviews in Team Plasma. I love you, but this wording is a bit strange, and I encourage you to read over it and find what's ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Happy Early Christmas in July
Hey, Pinkiegirl13, Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Review Day! I love you, and I wish I could give you a present on July 11-13, but July 11 was my sister's birthday ...
Jul 27, 2014