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i'm pretty sure there's some technical mix up with the forum haha. this was from 2005, so i'm sure forum changes somehow mixed things up. i like that i got ...

hey, thanks for all the comments! =) i would like to keep this open to interpretation, so i won't put a message to it. anyway, thanks again for the comments! ...

thanks for the critiques from both of you! haha yeah i'm reallllllly rusty. but i know snoink will come along and save me from failing completely xD. thanks again for ...

hi there! i know i wrote this ages ago, but i am thinking of sending this into a competition and could use all the critiques/comments! if anyone would like to ...

hi! thank you so much for reading! i don't have a lot of experience with writing scripts, so thanks for the tips! i'm making it into a play to be ...

hey, thanks for all the crits guys. =) claudette and fand, you're right about that part with the sugar and dashes. now that i'm re-reading it, it seems awkward. xantham, ...

hahah i like it. i like the allusions you made to all their respective music genres. it kind of reminds me of american pie by don mclean. nice work =)

i have read 9 1/2 of these... i read all the lord of the rings book until the second half of the third book (technically the fifth). heh i feel ...

hmm... you lost me for what you are trying to say. whenever i read your poetry, i feel as if i nearly understand, yet i lose it all by the ...

i have to second crysi in the lack of helpful critique and the wow-ness of this. beautiful poem. profound message. keep on writing. please. =)

just a suggestion, but maybe... So sleep in peace and worry not, Preserve your integrity, But keep it known as I have shown, Eloquence is wasted on me." i don't ...

yay liz! you have returned! although, i'm not really sure what you are saying here. it seems like a poem only you truly know, but it's something i still like ...

thanks for the comments. sorry about that line. it is confusing... i think i don't really make it clear but it's kind of a connection of alcohol and "love" (or ...

i don't give criticism. i give feedback. we shouldn't even be having this posted everywhere. "PM". but get over yourself and offyour high horse. seriously.

Maybe try getting your message off clearly in the first couple of lines will make it understandable to the reader. It seems well put together, but the core doesn't really ...