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Charlii101 wrote: (the year is 1872) The sun beamed down on my sweating back and my ginger hair fell down below my shoulders, A semicolon should be put here or ...

I think its a really good poem! I mean if you're just starting out, then its okay. Not everybody makes an awesome, universally wowing poem on their first try. If ...

Hey, Sionarama! Let's start with the good: Good job! You were right, this is suspenseful! I think its cool how you kinda just throw the reader into the story. At ...

Hey, pazey13! This was a really excellent piece! You followed the YWS "Show, not tell" phrase perfectly! Plus, I can totally relate! I'm scared of roller-coasters too! You described that ...

Oooo, nice! I like the Hunger Games a lot and this is really good! If I'm not mistaken, Haymitch is the mentor for Katniss and Peeta right? I've never really ...

Bolt, I really liked this because I'm into this kind of thing. I personally think you did really well. I really didn't even catch your mistakes because I was so ...

Hey, I thought it was really good! Although, if you could, you should make it a novel or something! It has great potential! As for the mistakes, we all make ...

Hey, I really liked your poem! I really can't talk, because I've never actually written poetry, but remember poetry doesn't always have to rhyme. You can pattern your poem with ...

Hey blue, i really liked this!!! I'm new to young writer's society and yours is the first I've read! I loved how it started out in ancient times. And I ...