elephantwalrus

Well, I had a hard time finding a beat, too. All in all, I really liked the verses. They were very sweet. The chorus, on the other hand, was a ...

This poem is filled with profundity :D I like it a lot. My only problem with it is that it lacks a definite flow. The whole thing doesn't connect very ...

This is a very nice poem! You broke the flow a couple times ("I am drenched in wishes that refuse to disappear," "When day comes, they hide and wait for ...

I liked the poem, but I was distracted by the lack of punctuation. I think adding some would add a lot to the piece Into the opened-up twilight They soar ...

I liked it, too. And feel free to put poems up that aren't your best! I do it all the time, and they often become some of my best after ...

The flow of the words was good, but I didn't like the punctuation. It messes with how the poem is read; I'd suggest using more commas instead of periods. I ...

I like this poem a lot; with a little tweaking, it could be fabulous!! The moonlight illuminates my heart, I like the word "illuminates," but not here. I don't know ...

This is a creative piece, and I have only two criticisms: 1. I think it would add to the poem if you used more punctuation in the stanzas 2. I ...

I liked how this song stayed consistent in theme and focus until the end. On second thought, I didn't like the references to alcohol at the end; something major like ...

I liked it's simplicity. It's thought provoking for a moment, but then the reader can easily move on. If that was your intention, you succeeded, if not, I don't know ...

Yay for line by lines! When the tears fill my eyes And a sharp pain picks my throat 'Cos I dont want him to see my fear (you refer to ...

This poem is very thoughtful, but I felt that the flow broke a few times. By the grit and cutting grain we call the world. So I arm myself with ...

Hmm...I only have two comments for this: 1. I would put the "I wait in silence" on another line 2. I don't really get the "what makes me different" line. ...

I really like the idea of this poem being fantastic, and with a little work, it could be. First, I'd work on the line breaks, especially in the second half. ...

I liked this poem and think it has a lot of potential. One of the problems I for see is that you use the word "see" too many times. Try ...