electricbluemonkey

Yeah, I could visualize it very well. It was very cool, I like it. Very strong poem and has good words.

Yeah, I love it. Very dark and depressing which makes the reader want to read more. Afterall, youre name is Darko so...I guess that is why it is so dark. ...

Yeah, there is a lot to discuss in this poem, and a lot going on at once. I liked last 6 lines, those were the best I think. Or I ...

Midnight Swim fits it very well, actually. I think it would be good for this poem. The description in this poem was the best overall. Very good and thorough, I ...

I loved it, one of my favourite ever. I liked how it flowed kind of like a Shakespeare poem. I could even visualize some parts, such as a skip toward ...

I agree with Dreami, it kind of takes away something from the poem. But overall I liked the rhyming and the whole poem flowed well and was thorough.

Yeah, but I think the second line, where it says it was the hottest sticky day or something, it is too long. You should take out city or one of ...

I havent read them in about 4 years or so...wait...yes, maybe...

Yeah...and don't forget...err...strange...

I've got a question! How can paying too much for a place to sleep be blackmail? Isn't blackmail usually when you have to pay someone or else they will do ...

Ok, so I am here like you told me Eleore. I read that story...err...prologue...one word: wow. Simply, wow. That was...GRAND! Very good, although some parts I didnt understand. Well, must ...

One word...*starts drooling of story*...OH SORRY! Oh yeah, one word: WOW! That was really good. Very Edgar Allan Poe like (like Nate said) and overall very good. Out of 10 ...

Yeah, one comment...LONG! But a good read, although it had some run ons and some telling instead of showing, it was good. Not GREAT but it was good. You can ...

Yeah, never thought of WERE FREE! And what is the main idea of the story, I know someone else asked...

Ooh, very long but worthwile. I agree with Nate, why how did the mom know she had amnesia though? And wouldnt she just look at something with her name or ...