Ew. So this is what I wrote like three freaking years ago. *cringes*
Please. No crits. Just let this one die.
I drifted deeper and deeper into my soul.
Folds of it swept over me,
Rocking me softly to sleep.
As I loitered on the edge of consciousness,
I thought I saw your face above me.
Suddenly, I tried to get back to you,
To reach you.
I thrashed and twisted
Trying to break free.
But sweeping tendrils of softness now became solid bands of iron,
Dragging me deeper and deeper into the Dream-realm.
Ew. So this is what I wrote like three freaking years ago. *cringes*
Please. No crits. Just let this one die.
Wow, I like it.
Reads really well and has deep meanings.
Especially the last two lines.
I really like the rhythm of the poem. It's well written and the words used are interesting too. 
very nice, as everyone else said, you can really visualize it and feel it. Keep up these nice poems, you are really great!
Yeah, I could visualize it very well. It was very cool, I like it. Very strong poem and has good words.
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I gave me a great image of the poem. Nice job! 
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