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Re: Starbucks Coffee Cups
I really liked this, nothing to critique really. I loved the Styrofoam line (just like everyone else, I know...). Only problem is, that Starbucks don't use Styrofoam cups and they ...
May 19, 2009 -
Re: The Benefits of Being a Smart Ass
This was great! I laughed constantly in that kind of laughter where you know there'll be something funny coming up so you may as well not stop. Epic craftsmanship my ...
Apr 18, 2009 -
Re: Go to Hell
I liked what I read of this. But it really was too long for the Internet. I think if you broke it up into parts just for the critiques then ...
Mar 6, 2009 -
Re: Death's Visit
Wow, i really liked this. It was entertaining and amusing and didn't lose my attention. The dialogue and action was great. I loved that Tom and death seemed like just ...
Mar 6, 2009 -
Re: Worst Book You've Ever Read
Ok, at the risk of being shot by all the people who think it is the greatest literary work since sliced bread... To Kill A Mockingbird is the absolute worst ...
Mar 3, 2009 -
Re: Love, Death, Coming of Age
Welcome to YWS! Right-o, I know that this little piece has already gotten quite in-depth reviews but I shall add my two-cents worth as well... Here's a little known fact ...
Dec 21, 2008 -
Re: How I Killed Mona Bradley (intro)
I love it! It really does make me want to read more. Mona caught my eye the minute I saw her, dancing into the cafeteria, very climatically (I don't think ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: Remember the time? --Revised
Wow, this is sheer brilliance. Your writing makes my day. I can't fault it, although I much prefer the revised version of this piece; I like that it's slight;y longer ...
Nov 20, 2008 -
Re: All my love
I quite like this. Very nice. However; the lack of punctuation and excessive spacing, in my opinion, made it quite hard to read. I tried to put the correct punctuation ...
Nov 11, 2008 -
Re: If You Only Knew-Revised
I really like this. Very thought provoking. Only things I would change: these lines Would you tell me that you love me? Would you pretend to be above me? I ...
Nov 1, 2008 -
Re: Rose Petals...
I like it so far, your MC seems real already. The faint sound of rain tapping against the window hadn’t lulled Rose to sleep. For some reason I just love ...
Oct 11, 2008 -
Re: All There Is [Edited 8/30/08]
I really liked this. It was powerfully written and you have an amazing way with the second person (which most people can't do). Just a few little things which I ...
Aug 30, 2008 -
Re: Watching Windows - Chapter 7
Gah! All my extremely intelligent points that I'd jotted down have already been taken!! Uhhhhh... Just in this sentence: so tight it felt like he would never let go. And ...
Aug 30, 2008 -
Re: All Babies Are Blessings (1)
I love this so much!!! I actually read All Babies Are Blessings first, which kinda ruined the element of mystery for me...But I would have read through this even so... ...
Aug 22, 2008 -
Re: An Apology
awww, I like it... I think it's sweet. The lines would benefit from being like this, however,: Friend: let me say first that I am sorry. I am sorry, because ...
Aug 18, 2008
